Taboo [6]

o.o Dear god! What will happen next? He should apologize now! He shouldn't make her feel like she's taken for granted.
Girl, you're inspiring. Take my word for it! Chapter seven, chapter seven!

Hi, Dad. I wanted to take a break from writing. I have a speech to finish today actually, but my mind is too drained. I just wanted to read something...then watch. :p

It's been a long time since I've read Taboo. =))

pink for nitpicks
purple for attention
green for changed

Just a suggestion:

Grab a knife and dissect me for the answers, is what I wanted to tell her.

I think that's better if...

I wanted to tell her: Grab a knife and dissect me for the answers.

It just feels like it cuts the flow there.

They were precious. Fragile like glass and that Mother of mine shattered them.

The phrase "fragile like glass" feels like it should be part of the previous sentence, or let it just be one sentence.
I'll suggest:

They were precious--fragile like glass, and that Mother of mine shattered them.

Annoyed, I smirked. “Olivia, if she didn’t tell you then what makes you think I would? Just forget it. I’ll hand the situation, so stop pissing me off.”

“I wasn’t hiding it,” I retorted. “I don’t waste my time talking to people who are a few peas short of a casserole.”

Daddy, explain please. =) I'm innocent. LOL

“Hey, Liliah, Chase is having a Homecoming party this weekend, so I was thinking whether or not you wanna go with me? I’ll be fun,” he added, as if the words could buy her out.

And why I use it, people go all, "whatta weird name..." O_o why is it so???

What I think of this chapter is, Luke was talking too much? O_o wow, he's really opening up, I guess...
Nothing much to say. everything is still flowing wonderfully. =)) Though, now I'm turned off for Luke's mouth. O_o
Whatever, he's fiction. hahahaha!

~ Jash ♥