Written on a boat ride home

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I’m currently on a boat bound for Cagayan de Oro, it being sem break at last.

This after hours of checking under the bed, rummaging drawers for things I might have forgotten, and cramming piles of clothes into my little maleta, where they barely fit. And still there is a wilderness of schoolthings on my desk. They refuse to be packed. On the walls are three pictures I took one June sunrise in Rizal Boulevard, a picture of my dog Padfoot, and Rudyard Kipling’s poem “If.”

The dorm grew lonelier and lonelier as the day of departure neared. So many friends had gone ahead of us. Already, janitors were cleaning up rooms, sweeping away the trash left by the careless inhabitants, putting away bedsheets till the one piece of evidence that anyone had lived there at all was the note on the door: “Please leave your footwear outside.” Where, naturally, nothing was left.

I found I needed a moment to take it all in. The halls, the cream-colored walls, the gray doors, the red floor of the rooms. The verdant campus lined with acacia trees. This peaceful seaside city, the site of so much learning, where I made so many friends, which I would all have to leave behind. Until I get back next sem, at least.

As I left with Franz and David for the pier this morning, it struck me how, in spite of all the “gimingaw na kaayo ko ninyo” (Cebuano for "I miss you so much") talk with high school friends, I found myself clinging to these last moments in Dumaguete. It all became clear: I didn’t want to leave yet.

Shortly before we leave, a place begs us not to go. Brings out all the big things we love about it, the small things we didn’t notice, which add to its charm. Busies us with last-minute obligations: an errand from a friend, things to put away because someone else is sleeping in our rooms. And yet, somehow, still leaves us with enough time to look around, one last time.

Just as we keep souvenirs of a place, a place also keeps souvenirs of us in the form of the things we leave behind by accident, choice, or necessity, and displays these on the walls and on the table for future guests to see. Perhaps this is its way of remembering us, of showing that one day it hopes to return to us as we return to it.

In the end, it accepts, far more than we do, the inevitability of our leaving. Gives back what we lose, on the very day we have to leave. In my case, the slippers I hadn’t seen since June.

Because, whether we like it or not, we will always be leaving. Leaving to live.
Last edited by redrudderhouse on Tue Oct 26, 2010 10:14 pm, edited 1 time in total.




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It sounds like a story, either way I loved it. It was beautifully written. You didn't need lots of over description it was just the basics really but that was all we needed to know. We didn't need to know the door had a thrre inch gash to the left of the handle from when a lamp fell over and smashed it, all we needed to know was that it was grey. Amazingly done, truly amazing. It gives me a feel of the last day of summer, where autum is already amoung us. The leaves already turning but the last heat is still hangiong in the air, and just because it was by water it heightened this emotion.

You played on my own memories and brought them out vividly in this very piece. I sincerly thank you for this.

Well done, a hundred times over. Not one fault.

~Retro Disco666
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I liked it. You really get the sense of the emotions you were feeling at the time. I could vividly see you standing at the pier and there's a feeling of anticipation running right through it. Just one nitpick. I was always told never to start a sentence with 'and' despite seeing a few authors do it occasionally.

redrudderhouse wrote:And still there is a wilderness of schoolthings on my desk


= There is still a wilderness of school things on my desk.

The ending is good too. I found it poignant and i think it's something everyone can relate to, as, like you say, we are always moving from place to place to live. Also i like the idea that not only do places leave impressions on us, but we leave our own impressions on places.



In a world too often governed by corruption and arrogance, it can be difficult to stay true to one's literary and philosophical principles.
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