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Ice Castle
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Roadnevertravelled
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Thu Oct 14, 2010 10:14 pm
Roadnevertravelled
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Thu Oct 14, 2010 10:14 pm
Ice castle
I live here
In my castle of ice
frozen, sparkling,
ice.
I do not feel
the chill of ice
just the warmth
of being
somewhere I love.
The sun comes up.
Melting,
breaking,
losing all that's left.
I try to rebuild
my castle
of ice.
Last edited by
Roadnevertravelled
on Fri Oct 15, 2010 11:44 pm, edited 1 time in total.
If it ain't broke, don't fix it.
Funkymomo
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Fri Oct 15, 2010 12:07 am
Funkymomo
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Fri Oct 15, 2010 12:07 am
OMG I love it! Great feeling to it also. try to use more big words!
Light one candle instead of cursing the darkness.
Wondergirl59
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Fri Oct 15, 2010 12:15 am
Wondergirl59
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Fri Oct 15, 2010 12:15 am
Oh my God. I absolutely love it. It's kind of sad at the end where you say you have to rebuild your castle but thats why I love it so much. But it's not really that sad because you say you love it so it can't be that sad.
Life can be amazing if your slightly strange
Kwantack
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Fri Oct 15, 2010 9:44 pm
Kwantack
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Fri Oct 15, 2010 9:44 pm
Dude, I loved this! And it sounds like everyone else does too! Maybe add a period at the end of your last sentence, and job well done!
"The only bad ideas are the ones never tried." - Puck,
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