Within the Wings of Angels

Crafted wings
wrap around
my being,
carrying me
to heights
I've never known.
Letting me see
new and glourious things,
all the while
protecting me
from harm.

I really like this poem, but the way it seems now just seems choppy. The rhythm isn't strengthen by the short lines at all. I know I am pushing my style on you, but I would do it this way. It would improve the rhythm I think. In there are a few general comments as well.

Flower~Child wrote:Crafted wings wrap around my being,
carrying me to heights I've never known.
Letting me see new and glorious things,
all the while protecting me from harm.

O.K. yeah I see that it makes the poem seem way shorter. Is that why you formatted it the way you did? Because short poems are not bad. They are what they are and I really like (*likes*) But, if you read the lines out loud it sounds way smoother.

I love the meaning I got from this poem. It was literal yet symbolic. That is awesome and something I have yet to master. The title should always stay the same, because without it I would have much less sense of the poem overall.

A. S.

I felt like the lines were too short and, because of that, and because it was so small, it didn't have a lot of force. I'm not saying that a poem has to be dynamic, but I just felt like it could've had more to it. Overall, though, I like the concept and I think it could really turn into something if you expanded on it.
Keep writing,
StoryWeaver

this is a good poem but it can be improved
1. i think the lines were too short.
2. the topic you have picked is amazing.
3. i think you can add a lot more to this topic.
4. i thoroughly enjoyed this poem. i expected it to be a bit longer but what you wrote was good.
Keep Writing!

Flower~Child wrote:Crafted wings
wrap around
my being,
carrying me
to heights
I've never known.
Letting me see
new and glourious things,
all the while
protecting me
from harm.

Well Flower, I must say I was truely impressed by this. I tend to write poems like this, but people seem sto think they are pointless >_> Anyways, enough about my failed sorrow:) Great job, I advice you to keep writing!

Singer

it is a very good poem.