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She is as stubborn as a dog afraid to get into water; she would never agree with me, she would never listen.

She is as kind as an ant helping doing its part for its colony; she would be there for me when I need some one.

She is as knowledgeable as a super human computer; she would help me make decisions that were very difficult for me.

She is as generous as a group of people raising money for the less fortunate, she would help me in times of need.

She is as supportive as an element to start a fire, without one element it would not start; she helps me be when i'm down

She is as confident as a person who will publicly speak in front of a huge crowd; she helps me be who I am.

She is someone who I want to be with forever and I hope she never changes.
Last edited by CaptianRandom on Tue Oct 05, 2010 10:05 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Aww how appreciative and dearly. However:
1.raise money for the less fortunate----> raising, is the verb to be used here.
2.helps me be----> helps you be what? happy perhaps.
3.speak in front o a---->speak in front of
4.crowed----> crowd

Nice piece.
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This reminds me of a Shakespearian Sonnet, "My Mistresses Eyes Are Nothing Like the Sun" I believe. I can't remember the number. I think it's his most romantic.

You love this girl because she is who she is. You love her for reasons other than being beautiful.
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AsxLoversxGo wrote:This reminds me of a Shakespearian Sonnet, "My Mistresses Eyes Are Nothing Like the Sun" I believe. I can't remember the number. I think it's his most romantic


I got a little confusing at this part.
She is as kind as an ant helping doing its part for its colony; she would be there for me when I need some one.

Is the some one one word or two words?

Anyway it's a good one and keep writing because practice makes things become prefect.

Keep Writing,

Alicia
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