Worries About Today

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Admit it, the world economic crisis is rather worrying. In one way or another, it has somehow affected you too. Whether it was something drastic like losing your job or something not so major like having to cut back on dinners in expensive restaurants, it has, in one way or another affected your life and not in a good way either.

There are all kinds of doomsday scenarios going around and on top of that a lot of people don't believe in full recovery before 2012. And no, the Mayans have nothing to do with that one.

Either way, until the economic crisis is over, everyone feels quite uncertain of things. They may lose their job practically any second, or their business could go bankrupt. Then, their whole life could fall apart. In my dad's company there seems to be some issues as well. People losing their jobs, in the hundreds. My dad could be the next one any second. If that happens, our whole life could fall apart. We would have to say goodbye to a great school, great neighborhood and may be even college for us kids. It would be exceptionally hard to survive. Once you get a taste of luxury and not having to worry about something costing too much, the prospect of losing it scares you. Losing it will probably terrify you. I know it would terrify me.

I don't know, it seems to me that before this, most people took their jobs for granted and they had few worries about anything. Now, I see people's parents losing their jobs all the time, I see people moving away for new job opportunities and leaving their life behind. I see fear and chaos caused because of this crisis. No one's safe anymore. Not employees, employers or their family.


This is an international disaster. If we don't come out of it soon, it may take a turn for the worst. And no matter what some people are saying, we're most likely not going to come out of this soon. So brace yourselves people, this is only the beginning.




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Great article! I feel your vivid descriptions of the current economic situation. The only grammar issue I could find was "not employees, employers NOR their families." Your personal anecdote was a nice touch, and I feel added to your generalization regarding how everyone else is coping. Great work, keep it up, hope to read more from you soon! :D




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In one way or another, it has somehow affected you too.

The "too" is redundant.

Whether it was something drastic like losing your job(comma) or something not so major like having to cut back on dinners in expensive restaurants, it has, in one way or another(comma) affected your life and not in a good way either.

Underlined section could be more concise. One possibility: "negatively". Concision lends your writing, especially in nonfiction, greater power simply because it makes a point as quickly as possible.

This entire paragraph (and essay) had me thinking unsupported claims. While you do provide examples, there is no solid proof to back up your arguments. Including statistical data or reports from accredited sources reporting falls in the stock market and shifting trends in consumer behavior would help bolster your argument and strengthen it. Right now, I see none of that, and it severely weakens your essay. Rather than being informative and cautionary, it becomes alarmist.

Since you included such a personal aspect of how the economic crisis has affected you, turning this into an essay about how the economic crisis has affected you personally as well as those close to you would be the better choice. You wouldn't have to worry about including outside sources as you would be the primary source for an essay about your experiences. You could also make more of an emotional impact upon the reader without causing unfounded alarm.

As it stands, this essay is overgeneralized and not supported with objective fact. Changing it to a format that is more subjective would be the best choice, otherwise you need to incorporate objective sources to support your claims.
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hey! here's the review :D sorry if its short
good article, i love how you said "no one's safe anymore", and its true, i mean it gets you thinking "is anyone really going to survive?" so Keep writing! :D hope to read some more of this kind article from you!
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when the flood comes up, I will dance in the rain
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