When Sleeping...

Hi! I quite like this poem, but there are a couple of things that distracted me from it. Firstly, the colour is kind of difficult to read. No biggy, it's just something to keep in mind for the future - the reader should be captivated by your words and not distracted by the colour of them. Secondly, there are a few typos or spelling mistakes in there, so make sure you use spell check.

Apart from that, I think it's good, particularly the first stanza. I like the idea that peace has a speed, and "Your mind unravels / like an acient scroll" is an interesting image, so good work. You just need to take more care when you're typing and check your work thoroughly.

Hey,
Thanks Matt, for the advice! I agree that the colour was a bit distracting so as you can now see I have changed it. Also, my spelling errors have been corrected and I will definitely spend some time in the future editing my work. Thank you once again.
-Blossom xx

This is a really good poem. The imagery you used is wonderful, and I felt invested in the poem. My favorite line:
"They are as clear as the honest reflection in a mirror". I'm not sure why I liked this line, but it was good.