Sirens' Songs

Flashing mirrors
Sewn so carefully into the shifting fabric (of time)
Reflected an unearthly world
Of dancing women
With beautiful ebony and ivory skin
Swaying to songs of another thought
Another mind.

Their lips barely parted
Just enough to let the sound pour out
Sirens’ songs
Seducing the light
And calling the night
Dwelling in the hearts of everyone
But too weak to escape by themselves.

Their hands joined,
They begin another beat
To wild drums and crazed guitars
A rapturous song of life
Echoing into the ears of nonexistent listeners
Who have missed the reason for living
Missed the song of spirits.

Hi, this is MasterMind, and I thought this was a very well written poem. I liked the rhythm, and all the adjectives you used. The poem was...OTHERWORDLY. (had to use it) And it left me feeling I knew what a siren's song was like. The only thing in this poem I didn't like, was on the 2nd line in the 1st stanza when you put on the end " (of time) " it just seemed like an afterthought and took away from the poem's flow and rhythm, which was also superb as well. I hope I helped you here, and didn't just blather on pointlessly.

Honestly, I think this was wonderful. I got that feeling of reading an old masters poetry, if that makes any sense. I like the "(of time)" that the person above me didn't. I don't think it took anything away, it added to it. If you read it right, it's perfectly fine.
Otherwise, the imagery you had going on here was superb, I like how you described everything without really describing.
The one thing I found odd was the mention of guitars? It just seems off, like it's too stark for the more dreamy feel of the poem.
I completely loved this poem, it's wonderful. One of the best I've ever read on here!!

Keep writing,
~Shaard

This poem is very... I'm not sure how to describe it, but it's good. It flows smoothly, and makes me think about things that are peaceful and traditional.

Their hands joined,
They begin another beat
To wild drums and crazed guitars
A rapturous song of life
Echoing into the ears of nonexistent listeners
Who have missed the reason for living
Missed the song of spirits.

The line in red doesn't fit in as well as the others. I think the drums and guitars are fine, but maybe use different adjectives to describe them so they don't seem so bold and stand out. In contrast, I really like the line after that and the way you ended this poem.
Great job and keep writing!

I agree with the first reviewer, I don't like how you put (of time) in the first stanza. I think you could find a more clever way of portraying what you mean. Other than that, though, I was pleasantly surprised by the piece in general. It was interesting and original.
Keep writing,
StoryWeaver