Merry Christmas! in the seventh year

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In the beginning was the Word
clothed in royalty created the world
Ancient of Days, given for our sake
takes
all our stains of sin away




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I first have to say that the transition from the first and second lines was really messy and confusing. Was the Word clothed in royalty?
The same thing goes for the second to the third. Confusing.
I like it, it has an interesting feel to it, but I would like to understand it more.
Shakespearian tongue-twister:

To sit in solemn silence
In a dark, dank dock
In a pestilential prison
With a lifelong lock;
Awaiting the sensation
Of a short, sharp shock
Of a cheap, chippy chopper
On a big black block.



One by one they went / And, though each laughed as he returned to earth / Their souls were in their eyes.
— Alfred Noyes (Watchers of the Sky)