Cheating

Hey Kaywiia,

Well, I've never reviewed lyrics before so this won't be very technical but I rt meally liked it. I could feel myself swaying to the unheard music. It reminded me very strongly of Unfaithful by Rihanna, though, which is good and bad.
Good because the words were strong enough to bring on the thought of a popular song, but bad, well, because it's already been done.

Just my thoughts. Who did your friend end up choosing?
Tanya

Hi there, Kaywiia.

I don't review lyrics much, but...here we go.

I think you have a nice idea here; though, like Writer said, the first thing that popped in to my mind was, "Whoa, this sounds a whole lot like Unfaithful by Rihanna," seeing as I had just listened to that song not twenty minutes before. This to me is a bad thing. When you write a song, you want the lyrics to be a fresh dose to the listeners. People may write about cheating, but they each give their own twist to it. EX: "According to You" by Orianthi (not so much cheating, more choosing), "Unfaithful" by Rihanna, or "Before He Cheats" by Carrie Underwood.

I suggest you try to add a different twist to your song.

Other than that, this is really good. Though - who did she choose? o__O

-Mizz-

I hadn't heard Unfaitful before this, so I didn't know it sounded like it. Thanks for the help guys. I will work on fixing this.