Ok! Well I guess I'll be the first to comment It's very short, but i think that adds to the point. The only think I would suggest is changing shoving at to shoving off, but that's just my opinion lol
These lies are leading me astray, it's too much for me to stay. I don't wanna live this destiny, it goes on endlessly. I see you so please stay strong, I'll sing you one last song and then I'm gone. I don't wanna live this destiny, it goes on endlessly.
You definitely have very good imagery and emotion. It's a very well poised poem and I agree with the shoving comment before, but after all it is your work of art. I would also say maybe to use commas instead of some periods. For example in these lines, 'Erasing them. Killing them.', it may flow better to put a comma rather than a period. I love though, that it has almost the same sort of feeling as a haiku only something very different altogether. I applaud you for having such deep emotion in such a short poem. Keep up the good work!