Dear Best Friend

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Hey guys, it's Kat (alwaysawriter) again. Thanks for the comments on what I last posted! :)

February 11, 2010

Dear Tarah,

Remember the time you were laughing so hard you fell off my bed and kept right on laughing? I joined you then. Mom peered in the room on the way to the office, saw us cracking up like four year olds hyped up on sugar, said that she didn’t want to ask, and closed the door behind her. Of course you do, because you remember a whole lot more of the memories before you moved than I do. I remember your last Fourth of July here, me with my Grandparents, you with your dad. I wasn’t allowed to go hang out with you because my grandparents were there; my parents told me that I could next year, but I somehow knew you wouldn’t be here the following year.
I remember spending the night at your house, getting so absorbed in a book and snapping at you, and the endless nights you spent over at mine. By the time you’d left, we’d already had the weeknight sleepovers down to a pat, despite the fact that your dad wouldn’t let you come over anymore. I remember you crashing once you climbed into your bed on the floor and you could just tell how safe you felt. I’d watch you sleep for a while before I went to sleep myself, wondering how someone as kind and as caring as you could have ended up with such a crappy home life.
My first memories of you were when you started to ride my bus in sixth grade. I was immediately drawn to you, but so was a close friend of mine. At first, you went to sit with her. However, that was one possible friendship I was not about to lose—even if I was competing with my best friend of three years. I started to talk to you, although scared and timid, and gradually I felt like I was winning the friend battle. I did win—as it turned out. I was the one you called when you were scared and the one you told the deepest secrets to that, to this day, I’m the only one, outside of family, that knows. I find out later that you probably had the most fun with your other friends but that was okay, because I knew the things they would and will never know. You called us soul sisters and I still believe that we are.
I talked to you for the first time in three years three or four months ago. You sent me your new number in an e-mail and I called you that very day. You were screaming my name and I was just grinning, happy to be reunited with you. You called your current boyfriend and screamed in his ear, while I just sat back and laughed, apologizing to him. I haven’t talked to you in a month now, due to your grounding, but I’ve left messages and reminded you how much my parents and I care.
I hope you’re okay, Tar. I know you’re strong and you’ll get through whatever is going on. Just remember, please, that I’m here if you need me.

Your best friend,
Kat




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Too personal.

Thats really what I initially get from this.

The whole thing was a more for your eyes only thing.

but hey, you shared so who gives a flip.

Now...

It was all very bittersweet, like, yeah you had great memories, but there was always some thorn just off screen snagging you or your friend. Competition and separation made this revelation of renewed contact towards the end sweeter, yet sadder because of the further mention of troubles and problems.

I dont comment on grammar because I'm the last person to do that. And I just really like this letter.

It was personal without being too dry and 'inside' and accessable to anyone with that one friend who was happiest when they were anywhere but home.

Starrr.
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Don't know what to say except seconding Eri--
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Eraqio said:
It was all very bittersweet, like, yeah you had great memories, but there was always some thorn just off screen snagging you or your friend.


Yes, I agree, but I think the thorn wasn't big enough. Come on, grounding? maybe you should have made it a little worse, maybe an accident, or some serious injury, or maybe the friend moved away. I just can't imagine somebody writing out this long letter just because their friend got grounded.
Also, it does seem far too personal, almost real. I felt a little weird reading it...

Sorry if this sounds harsh, but that's the real world, baby. :twisted:
Seriously though, good job.
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I actually really like this. I agree with Eraqio about the bittersweet thing, but i think it gives the letter a sense of realism.
This reminds me so much of me and my best friend, so that may be why i like it so much.
I enjoy reading it. Because it's sometimes difficult to read about someone else's life when you have no idea whats going on.
And i appreciate how simple this was to follow along with.

-Emily




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Eraqio wrote:Too personal.

Ahh, that old nut, eh? Well, I believe this is a letter to your best friend, am I right? Well, in that case this comment proves you've aced it. I can't stand letters that are written to family members of close friends and people write formally, that's just silly, right? Well, yes, but Eraqio does have a point. The letter definitely should be personal, no doubt and I think the other reviewers are completely wrong to suggest this is anything but a positive point to your article. Though, as a piece of writing it doesn't thrive. This isn't as much to do with the formality of it, but because the content is all happy and positive with the only downside being that your best friend has moved. As much as the emotion is probably there for the best friend you're writing it to, the emotion isn't there for an outside reader and as a piece of writing you have to draw them in too. You almost do it at some points, but I'm not sure you reach it's full potential, so perhaps if you put a couple more bad droplets in that the readers can familiarise with that may've happened between you two and the reader's interest should spark.

I hope this helped, Keep writing.
Ben



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