Another great poem Ash I can see a few people relating to it so I believe it was a great subject to write poetry on. The flow was a bit rocky towards the end but the start was good a engaging. Keep it up and I look forward to future work! -Dawn
wow! this had me hooked right from the start and it didn't disappoint me at the end. it had wonderful rhythm and clever rhyme.
Who can I turn to; where do I go? When nobody needs me, who will ever know? I'm at the point where I cannot stand, So show me the door, or please, take my hand.
this is definitely my favourite stanza
Sooner or later, we will have to face the fears and the horrors we tried to replace.
i think this would be better as sooner or later, we all have to face but i dunno, that's just me. well done! -jackle ps. you should do more reviews or people wont review your work
This poem is amazing. I really like your writing style. Don't think I can mention and thing "wrong" with it, except as mentioned above. Otherwise its perfect. Can't wait to read some more of your work!