Do the media have too much power?

To answer the question above, yes, I belive they do have way too much power. For example, during an Election, if they don't like a particular Party, they all gang up on that Party and comb it for the smallest thing that could go wrong and they extort it until it is blown out of proportion. Another example of how the media have too much power is the fact that if there is a person who has been charged for a brutal crime, one which is so sick that the person has to keep their name a secret, the media will band together and try and find it out. The problem here is that if they get the wrong name, that person will be persecuted for the rest of theit lives. The media, you see, are like vultures. They all scramble over themselves and pick at the tiniest morsel of meat, no matter how small it is. They say that they do a nessarcary service to people, but WHAT nessarcary service is to tell what celebrity has had sex with who? Or tell us about the latest fashon disasters? Not one I can think of!
They are all after one thing. A juicy piece of news, that is all they are after. We as a society listen to these parasites way too much. It is because of this that society is sinking. We watch the news and we see truely attrocious crimes and judge for ourselves who is guilty and who is not. Is this not the begining of an Anarchist culture? We as the people are owned by the Media Companies and we shall never get out of their strangle hold. Only if we ignore them more, then we can escape.

To answer the question above, yes, I believe they do have way too much power.

The first sentence (or at the least the first paragraph) of whatever you're writing should really draw people in. To me, this is sort of just a blunt statement. Try thinking of other ways to start this off with a bang and give it that real "wow" factor. The rest had little emotion or organization, and this might be a good conversation if you were talking aloud, but it doesn't really work for writing when you have to really explain and defend your opinion. Try to give reason and emotion, so that people can really sympathize with your statement.

Okay. I think when you write an opinionated article such as this, especially when it attacks such a broad form of writing and world service, you need to make sure you elaborate and focus. The whole of this is very naive and generalised. You mention examples such as this:

For example, during an Election, if they don't like a particular Party, they all gang up on that Party and comb it for the smallest thing that could go wrong and they extort it until it is blown out of proportion.

However, you haven't actually shown us any proof and you haven't talked about it enough either. You need to, for example, say things like "The recent debates during the UK election sparked media havok over Nick Clegg's charisma, but resulted in Gordon Brown being pushed to the sidelines." You need to be formal, even if you are being opinionated, or you'll lose readers because they'll dismiss it as an ignorant rant. If you want to get your point across it may also help to explore two points of view. For example, perhaps suggest that the media has grown to having so much power because of freedom of speech, thus in a sense they're broadcasting a generalised opinion of a majority and forgetting about the minorities, etc. That way you can still make sure your point is clear and unchangeable, but you are confirming that your reader still has their own choice in the matter. You know? No-one likes an opinion shoved down their throats.
From a gramatical point of view. Make sure your sentences are structured for the best of impact and exploring your point with control. Avoid all capitals such as this:

WHAT

This shows that you're failing to get that impact you want across to your reader. Instead, finish it with exclamation marks, shorten your sentence or format it in italics. Anything but capitals, because that's far too forced.

Hope this helped,
Ben (Non-Fiction Guru)

I do think I am going to lock this one, it has been on the front page for a while and I would like to see you guys commenting on something else. Many thanks for the tips and I hope to write another(better) article soon!