My Heart Flutters

My head hurts
My chest throbs
My legs wobble
My breath quickens
My eyes tear
My mouth waters
My heart flutters
For something I can't have
You

Simple but lovely--and definitely speaks to a lot of us who have experienced unrequited love! I used to experience some of these symptoms over a guy I liked for seven years. Sadly, he never liked me back, but that is life. Thanks for sharing your poem.

I really like this poem though sadly I have never loved a guy before. <3 I really like the bead, and I don't see anything you could change. I usually tell people they need punctuation, but i Like this poem just the way it is. Wish I could given more advice.
A. S.

Sweet. That is what I would call it, sweet and short and it demands attention. I felt that this was the right approach for this particular topic, right and creative and refreshing. You know it is nothing I have seen before and there is a lot of poetry right now talking about love and its the ordinary expected styles.
The other thing, the words you use are inventive and true! Oh my gosh, you are so right about the head hurting and legs wobbling, you nailed it right there.

KAH wrote:My mouth waters
My heart flutters

The desire here is executed perfectly. Its my favourite part. Great flow of ideas too.
Good job hey