All because of a boy. . .

16 posts1, 2
User avatar
Gender Male
Points 5033
Reviews 29
The way you wrote this story was very understandable; an easy read. I like how that was consistant and it carried through. I find that if one says too much about an emotion than it takes way from the actuall feel of the emotion. A quick couple words and nothing else is great. But at some points I found that there should have been an emotion described when there was not.
Otherwise, it was great!
"I know I can't slow down, I can't hold back
Though you know I wish I could
Oh no, there aint no rest for the wicked
Until we close our eyes for good." ---Cage the Elephant 'Ain't No Rest for the Wicked'



I should infinitely prefer a book.
— Mary Bennet, Pride and Prejudice