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12 year old children get to be exposed to words like "hussy"?
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Um, is 'hussy' a bad word? Not where I come from. Hum...

Anyway, Ember, another great chapter! Er, scene. I enjoyed it and I have no nitpicks about it. Vivica is truly evil ... But that's the point, isn't it?

Great work, keep writing!
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I was equally as clueless about "hussy"... I'm not the best at deciding age ratings I'm afraid... except for the obvious extremes! And I don't really write a lot of that kind of material. I apologise for any offensiveness Mikesly, but I really don't think it qualifies for a 16 rating... besides that word, what do you think of the writing?

Thanks for your review once again Tanya! Haha, I don't really need to keep writing, as I wrote the whole play a long time ago, I'm just posting the scenes bit by bit. I guess I can start editing though...
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Once again I am late on the draw! I am getting good at this whole late thing...
Well, everybody seems to have everything covered already.
I really actually like Viv's manner of speaking. It's the way I like to speak, although slightly more evil...
Anyways...
Nicely done and I can't wait till scene 7!
Guuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuurl.

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It had a perfectly round door like a porthole, painted green, with a shiny yellow brass knob in the exact middle. The door opened on to a tube-shaped hall like a tunnel: a very comfortable tunnel without smoke, with panelled walls, and floors tiled and carpeted, provided with polished chairs, and lots and lots of pegs for hats and coats—the hobbit was fond of visitors. The tunnel wound on and on, going fairly but not quite straight into the side of the hill —The Hill, as all the people for many miles round called it—and many little round doors opened out of it, first on one side and then on another.
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