Fight Over Flight

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Fight Over Flight

My best friend
She told me something I’ll never forget
She said to stand for the cause
Cos it’s worth fighting when it’s right
Don’t be afraid of failure
Stick around for the fight

Oh my best friend
She’s really not that bright
But she said one smart thing
That was
If we all fought for what’s right
The world would be a better place
So ho

CHORUS
Don’t hang your head in defeat
Hold your chin up high
Shout it loud and clear
I will stand and fight
To the bitter end
I chose that over flight

Carry on and on
Though he said you won’t make it
Believe me, you can
As long as you don’t fake it

When they put you down
Get right back up
And when they jeer and shout
Just punch them out

CHORUS
Don’t hang your head in defeat
Hold your chin up high
Shout it loud and clear
“I will stand and fight
To the bitter end
I chose that over flight”

If you don’t like it
Paint it black
And give it back
And tell them to burn in hell
Give them the finger
If they give you the sack
Don’t just, don’t just

CHORUS
Don’t hang your head in defeat
Hold your chin up high
Shout it loud and clear
“I will stand and fight
To the bitter end
I chose that over flight”

Buy him a drink
To forget all the pain
And tell him all you know:

CHORUS
Don’t hang your head in defeat
Hold your chin up high
Shout it loud and clear
“I will stand and fight
To the bitter end
I chose that over flight”

Gather up your army
And tell ‘em to put on a show
‘Cos we’ll beat those mother fuckers
We’ll show ‘em how it goes

I won’t hang my head in defeat
I’ll hold my chin up high
Shout it loud and clear
“We will stand and fight
To the bitter end
WE CHOOSE THIS OVER FLIGHT!”
Last edited by undeadbunnie on Wed May 19, 2010 12:19 am, edited 3 times in total.




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I guess another name you could choose for this could be "Fight Over Flight".
But then again I'm pretty bad at coming up with names... xD
You've never had to crawl, you've never had to see,
what it feels like to be so trapped underneath

the weight of someone's world, comes crashing down on me

I was longing to be free, I put the bullet in you and me

This is my farewell to you and I,
this will all end in tragedy




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And when they jeer and shout
Just punch them out

The second line is just so short, it sounds off, and it makes the rhyme sound forced, too.

Overall, I would have liked a bit more punctuation. It's a bit inconsistent, and having proper punctuation would make it easier to read and understand. Also, the lyrics are really spaced out, which makes it difficult to read. I suggest going back through and deleting the spaces in between the lines. Another thing that would help make things easier to read would be if you had a clear separation between the end of the chorus and the verses. Right now, they just blend into one another.

Overall though, this read smoothly, and I don't have anything much to suggest. :D
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What really knocks me out is a book that, when you're all done reading it, you wish the author that wrote it was a terrific friend of yours and you could call him up on the phone whenever you felt like it. That doesn't happen much, though.
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