A blind love poem

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I wrote this in like ten mintutes :)
It was 'in the moment'.
**runs off to the chat rooms**

Your potent and sweet aroma kindles my lonely heart.
Your rustic yet cherubic voice starts my pulse precipitately.
I am yet to behold your verdigris eyes.
I am yet to sink into your soft lips.
You’re golden humour is tranquil.
You’re eloquent manor grasped my attention from the very first breath.
Though I am yet to know your quirks and pretensions.
You have captured me and all I ask is that you speak to me and hold me.
You whisper the words I long to hear.
You hold my hand when the wind blows to rough
When all is bleak and Grey.
Hold my hand and tell me that the eyes
That once seaked a face
Now can truly envisage a silhouette of the beautiful person you are
And mean it.


- A blind girls love poem
Having the ability to inspire and revoke feeling in someone through the power of speach and thought. That is truly an art and that is why good Authors and writers are so unique and hard to find.

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Power is in the words :)




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:) Amazing Rhiannon.
Alot of the time, im on here using my PS3 & my trusty usb keyboard.
Dont expect much fancy quoting blocks... I shall do what I can. ;)




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I liked it. Interesting idea.
Okay, I think you use the word yet too much. Try using some other word. Also, while I was reading it, there seemed to be alot of large words in it. A very nice vocabulary but really, who knows what the words mean?
I dont, hehe.
Nice poem, keep posting more.
When all you have is nothing, there is alot to go around.




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I love the vocabulary you use; the only word I don't know the meaning to is verdigris.
This is a really good poem :]
You've never had to crawl, you've never had to see,
what it feels like to be so trapped underneath

the weight of someone's world, comes crashing down on me

I was longing to be free, I put the bullet in you and me

This is my farewell to you and I,
this will all end in tragedy



"And the rest is rust and stardust."
— Vladimir Nabokov