I was about to go to sleep a couple nights ago...when I started to write this in my journal. It's short, (because obviously it's a haiku) but I think it's funny and I hope you like it.
Sometimes I forget, to look where I am walking; I fall on my face.
Thanks for reading! Review please???
Apple of my soul, Eats me whole, Take one bite, No delight, Rotting hole.
Haha! I did like this and it was funny! There's not really much to critique about it because it's so short but it is a haiku. I've written a few haikus, but not any of them funny like this. The only thing is maybe take out the comma. Hope this helped! pm for anything
winie*
Sometimes you're the apple, sometimes you're the mouth- me XD
Russets and tangerine shades of old gold flushing the very outside edge of the senses ... deep shining ochres, burnt umber and parchments of baked earth—reflecting on itself and through itself, filtering the light. — Guildenstern (Rosencrantz & Guildenstern Are Dead by Tom Stoppard)