Turn the antenna, Radio fills with music, Listen to the song.
“There are many thing people have claimed can not be true and yet nearly all of them have ether been true to begin with or been made true by thous stubborn enough to ignore them.”-Scientist 666 from my 2009 NaNoWriMo novel.
Call me a traditionalist, but I don't know if I completely "get" this modernized haiku style. Generally (as far as I know), haiku deal with more natural themes, such as the seasons, weather, plants/animals, etc.
However, I don't pretend to be an expert on the subject, and neither will I attempt to give advice as if I were. If that's what you're looking for (expert advice, that is), I suggest going to http://www.toyomasu.com/haiku. These guys are the pros.
I really liked this haiku. Haikus are meant to be simple, but strike a chord with a reader, and you struck the chord with me. This will also definitely strike a chord with people who love music. But I think you definitely did a good job with this poem. It's short and to the point, and that's what haikus are also all about. Good job, Jane.
Apple of my soul, Eats me whole, Take one bite, No delight, Rotting hole.
