my heart - my own

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- Was bored on friday and i wrote this down. Decided to share it. Hope you like it. If not, just tell me whats wrong with it. I would really appreciate your help -


Its really easy to just say ‘I love you’ and much more easier to say ‘I care’,
As easy as these might seem,
They are of utmost importance to my heart - they are the reason for its existence.

I would never cease an opportunity to tell you these,
but more than just telling you or saying them,
I would love you to understand it…
Every part.

Its beyond looking into your eyes and just being convicted you’re the one,
Its beyond wanting to be the one to bear our children,
Its beyond wanting to be right there by your side,
To support and uphold to the end.
Its way beyond just planning ourselves the brightest of futures,
Its more than all of that.

Rather,
Its all the little things,
The many smiles you put on my face,
The quickening of my heart at the sound of your name – assures me,
The rush of joy I feel in my stomach, when I get up on my feet in the morning,
Just knowing I've got you,
The silent chuckles made when I sit down and recall our every moment together,
The calls, chats, messages and more…
It’s the picture of you I see in my dreams,
Even though sometimes i do not recall exactly how these dreams go,
I know we were meant to be…
Like I always say, love was made for you and I.

Little wonder, how my heart is stuck on yours,
The pain I feel knowing you're distressed even in the slightest of way,
The hurt in my heart when I want to be of help and cannot,
Or when i think of the perfect moment at the time, but cannot make it come to pass.

Truly, sometimes…
I want to hold you so bad,
I want to feel the warmth and assurance of your embrace,
I want to kiss you,
I want to touch you and feel your every touch,
I want so much more…
But,
It don’t compare to;
How much I just want to know all that worries you and be able to lend a hand,
As much as I want to be modest, I want you to see all this love in my heart and love me more for it,
It don’t compare to;
How much I want the whole world to see how lucky I’ve got and see that I’ve won myself more than d lottery or some jackpot,
Y! God damn it are words never enough?!
No matter how hard I try, no matter how many words I use, its never enough to fully show you how much my heart beats for you.
Its never enough to show how much “I LOVE YOU” and how much “I CARE”.
Last edited by romeyo on Wed Mar 31, 2010 3:29 pm, edited 1 time in total.
Never say goodbye.
Just smile and wave...




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I have rarely seen a poem as candid as this one, well done!!! Though there were some little details at the end, I can understand the little swear, it emphasises how deeply you feel (frankly that is a beautiful feeling, sans the swear) and I suppose the short forms like 'd' instead of 'the' and '2' instead of 'two' is here because you felt so strongly while writing the poem that you couldn't write the full word (that's the message you send a reader and if that's not true, I don't think you should try it).

All in all I love it. :)
I saw pale kings, and princes too,
Pale warriors, death pale were they all;
They cry'd - 'La belle Dame sans merci
Hath thee in thrall!'
-John Keats



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