Vampires Gaze

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Awakened by the dark dream…
I arose to find a lady’s scream.
Blood shot eyes was placed on her face.
And looked as if she’d been knocked in place…
Calm down! Calm down!! I begged to her.
Her eyes said no, and I found this truly absurd.
I looked to my right and fell into his gaze.
My creator. My love, had me in a daze
With small paces and steps he took his time.
Grabbed my neck and said “Your mine”
I felt sad, warm without the sun.
Then he whispered “What have you’ve done?”
As my trembling hands crossed over my gown.
I looked at the blood and merged up a frown.
“My love, my love, fed on this girl?”
And in my mouth I felt like I would hurl..
I placed my hands on my ears.
I felt like I had known him for many years.
The lust to feed was in my mind.
And my blood thirsty hunger wasn’t as kind.
Please, oh please, stop this now.
I need to find a way, somewhere, somehow.
Until I find a cure;
I am sure;
That I must feed upon my victims in rage.
And for my murderous charges, I belong in a cage.
For I am a monster with no heart.
Rip me to shreds, please tear me apart.
I beg of you, with all love and hate.
For if you don’t, your name will be on a slate.
Buried ten feet under; and then I pondered.
Maybe this is good.
For now I know that I could and would.
Vampire life is like a sapphire. Beautiful and forever.
I will give this up, maybe soon, maybe never.
Make the hunger disappear.
I will always be truly sincere.
Farewell my child and love.
For now I shall fly away as a dove.
Cast your sorrow, Cast sorrow.
I will see you tonight or tomorrow
Be afraid of my bite.
Because I will come for you in the night.


-Not the best poem, but a intresting one...
-Karmillia's Vane...




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That was very good. I've never read a poem like the one you just made but I do have some critcism though.
I got kind of confused by this little part it sounded kind of unuasul but thats just me it was still beautiful.
"Cast your sorrow, Cast sorrow.I will see you tonight or tomorrow"
When you said cast your sorrow, cast sorrow I didnt really think that flowed but thats just me. It could be something like cast cast off your sorrow. I will see you tonight or tomarrow. It didnt really sond good with the double cast your sorrow. Hoped I helped :smt001 maybe you could help me with my poems :smt003 :smt003
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