Seven Fold...[Read!]

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Seven fold: We can still hold.
Make me smile, and I will like you for a while.
Take my pale hand; And hold me while I stand.
Heart broken; Never the less in pain.
But the way you whispered my name..
Sends chills throughout my veins.
Can we freeze this moment in time?
I want you to always be mine.
Call me sweetheart, call me a witch.
I doesn’t matter what you do to flip my switch..
Love is only a four letter word.
And the way we fight is truly absurd.
I cant stretch the meaning of that emotion.
My heart is beating so hard; I can hear the commotion.
L-O-V-E is as deep as the sea.
But can it describe you and me?
A mysterious man once said;
Tis’ better to have loved and lost, than to have never loved at all.
Maybe he was right. Maybe not at all.
Stomp through my life, why not?
Stay for a while, our love already burns too hot.
Let the wind flow through my hair.
As we lay on the beach, let go of our cares.
This may be wrong, but I think our life has became a song.
Love songs, last so long..
Our lives are almost done.
And as we retreat to our place by the sun.
You shine brighter than the stars and we always had fun..
We fade in the dust…and I know for a fact that it wasn’t lust.
It was love, and nothing less.
And then you left my heart a broken mess…
-Karmillia's Vane...




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ooooooh I like! Very good, I can understand what the poem is telling me. Though I'm still unclear on the reference to seven fold. But, it's the story of a complicated love but to you it seems worth it. It seems like you derived this poem from many of your life's experiences. Probably a poem inspired by true events, either way, I feel for you. You see, I SUCK at reviewing poetry because I never really want to tell the poet what to change, it came from their mind and soul that to try to change it wouldn't be their poem anymore. So, great poem, I can definitely feel the emotion coming out of this one. Keep writing! :D
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