La luna e Bella (Lex & Cassie) chap 1

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Ok! This is my latest work, its on Vampires and yes I know everyone is doing something on Vamps, but I thought I would just try my hand at it, so please enjoy!! :D


Our bodies collided with ferocious want, as we tumbled onto the ruffled sheets. Lex's hands were already ripping at my cotton shirt, his lips left trails of kisses down my neck, making me forget what we had been arguing about.
But like the carnal animal I had become, my own itching fingers tore at his button down shirt, buttons flying about the large bedroom. I let my fingers run over the flat planes of his rock hard abs, I shivered with delight. A little moan of satisfaction escaped my mouth when I heard my bra unclasp.
Smiling Lex nestled his head between my breasts, that's when things started to slow down. We were both naked from the waist up, but it felt like we were already intimately connected, it was breath taking.
Lex trailed kisses all the way up to my wanting mouth, he kissed me slowly, I let out a small groan of pleasure at that feathery soft kiss.
Staring at him, his lips curled back in his signature cocky smile, and his ice blue eyes were fathoms deep tonight, still closed off to the world.
I ran my hand through his fine black hair wondering if he will ever let me in, he seemed to see the question in my eyes and looked quickly away.
My hands fell to his cheek, steering him back to my penetrating hazel gaze.
“Don't.” I whispered, drawing him in for a passionate kiss.
That kiss was like giving a starving man food after eons without one morsel, it was breath taking, carnal, beautiful, but it wasn't enough. It was never enough to just simply kiss Lex, to be held by him, to be wanted by him.
Reaching up between our bodies, I took his hand lead him down to the buckle of my jeans, silently asking him to make me his, again and again.
He snapped the leather belt in half as if it were a twig, his lips pressing to the hallow of my throat.
I stiffened instantly, I didn't want him to bite me, I wanted to remember tonight. I felt his cool breath inches away from my neck, goosebumps trailed up my arms as I waited for him to sink his teeth in my white throat and drink my blood.
He growled suddenly, and instead of the bee sting followed by a dream like state, I felt his lips gently kiss the very alluring spot on my neck.
Lex rolled away, onto the other side of the large bed, I was in shock, what was wrong?
“Lex?” I asked, my voice soft as I rolled onto my side facing him.
“Alright, go.” he said after a few silent minutes, his arm draped dramatically across his strong face.
“What?” I asked confused, he had never told me to go during our love making.
What had I done wrong?
He sat up, his bare chest glowing in the dim lit room, “Cassie, what had we been arguing about not,” he looked at his watch. “Fifteen minutes ago?”
Bells and whistles went off in my head, as my entire face lit up.
“Lex as you serious?” I about squealed from sheer delight.
He nodded his dark head solemnly.
I let out the squeal I had been holding in, throwing a fist triumphantly in the air, as I jumped into his lap wrapping my limbs tightly around his cold hard body.
I was surprised when he returned my hug, crushing my soft breasts against his chest. It wasn't until we fell back against the bed, that I realized he had other ideas, then a simple embrace.
It didn't bother me, I was too excited to think about sex, I was going home. That's what Lex and I had been arguing about before he distracted me by kissing me.
I was going home to see my family, it seemed unreal.
I was practically jumping out of my skin with excitement, while his body was crushing mine, I felt him grow hard and that only added to my excitement which caused me to wiggle and act a fool.
“Stop!” he barked, reaching down to stifle my wiggling legs, I froze instantly but a smile still lingered on my pink lips.
“There are rules now you know.” he said his eyes boring down into mine.
I nodded my head, but my mind started to wander to thoughts of my seeing my older sister and her husband and baby girl, to my little brother and his cute southern girlfriend, to my daddy and his rich brown eyes, my mom holding me...
“Cassie? Cassie!” he shouted bringing me back down to earth. “Are you even listening?”
“Yes Lex, what are the rules?” I asked in all seriousness, watching the corner of his mouth twitch with amusement.
“Rules number one: you cannot tell anyone about us or where you have been, ok?” he said firmly.
“Well duh.” I said exasperatedly, trying not to grin. Lex needed to relax a little once in a while, he was too stiff.
His blue eyes flickered with great annoyance. “Rule two: you can only stay there three days and two nights.” I went to interrupt but he pressed a finger to my lips. “And if, you are not back here by eight o'clock on the third night, I will be forced to believe that you have tried to escape and I will come after you. I will find you if you try to hide, because Cassie, you are mine.” the last word held a growl.
“Is that all?” I asked sadly, slowly coming to know that my freedom had been stripped away.
“For now,” he whispered, sitting up and running a hand through his dark hair.
I stood up looking for a t-shirt, watching Lex out of the corner of my eyes. There was a catch, there had to be. I found a grey crop top, I put it on over my bare chest, not caring for a bra.
I watched Lex wipe his hand across his cheek, I turned to face him the oddest expression on his face, odd because I have never seen him look so sad.
My heart melted, was he sad because I was leaving?
“Aw, Lex!” I laughed, cupping my hand against his chiseled face. “Don't cry, I'll come back.” I leaned down to kiss him, only to come face to face with cold blue eyes and an even colder expression.
“Cry?” he snorted, grabbing my arms roughly. “Cry over you?” he laughed maliciously.
I was taken aback, my hazel eyes wide with shock and hurt. “Sorry, my mistake.” I mumbled, feeling utterly small. I tried to hold back the tears that threatened to erupt, as I looked around the dark room for my suitcase.
“I would never cry over you, even if I could cry.” he went on, laying back arms supporting his head.
Tears blurred my vision, as I tried so hard to keep from sniffling loudly, I stumbled over a laundry basket almost doing a face plant, he didn't even seem to notice.
“In fact, it feels like your already gone.” he sighed happily.
I stopped in mid-stride, my tears quickly drying being replaced with red hot anger, that was too far, I decided. To far Lex, maybe I just won't come back.
I was at the door, my hand on the doorknob ready to escape, if not for a little while escape into the arms of my friend Starr, before I leave to visit my family.
I twisted the knob, the door creaked open and in a blink of and eye, Lex was at my back breathing down my neck, his hand resting on the door.
“And just where do you think your going?” he asked a growl at the back of his throat.
Last edited by Addawen19 on Sat Mar 06, 2010 5:57 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Wow, this story is great. I've even tried reading the twilight books and wasn't that interested. I suppose because it seems more grown up and more dark. I can say I am honestly hooked and would love to see more.

As for title, its hard to choose with so little to work with. What I could think of are things like"Vampires Prisoner" or something along that line. But a title like that would be to common and wouldn't do it justice.

So basically, I can't help. Sorry! But I'm sure you'll find a suitable title. Whenever I write, I think of many names and write them all at the top of my rough draft and by the time I am done with the story, the title seems to obvious to me in a way it wasn't before.

So good luck,

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This is great, i really enjoyed it...
how about something to do with the trailing of the kisses, that was a lovely moment which really stood out to me...so maybe the title can have something to do with some kind of trail or path because obviously it can mean more than just the intimate kissing.?
Hope it helps :D
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Ello, Addawen, the earth says hello! Haha, okay, enough of that. On to the review! *Peter Pan pose*

I usually try to stray away from vampire stories ever since that dreaded book-if it's not already obvious I am speaking of the Twilight series-. But this seems to move away from the modern Vampire cliche. I like my vampires Bram style. I hope this does not turn into a Stephanie type thing.
Okay, this has a good plot and flow to it. The first sentence of the second paragraph bothered me. The use of the word 'button' was just too much. Try to fix it up a bit. As for the title change, I don't have many suggestions. Actually, I have none at all. Maybe once the plot is further reaveled something will come to you. Best of luck, my friend.

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Thank you everyone!
This is like the most positive feedback I have ever gotten from one of my stories it is most appreciative!! I thank you so much, I will be posting more of Lex and Cassie's story soon, just gotta get my reviews up a little. Still working on a title it is very frustrating! But again thank you!!
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Hi Addawen, sorry I'm so late!!
I really wanted to review this but I've been so busy with work and all but I'm here!
(finally)
Okay on with the review!
First of all, I like how you wrote this. I mean, it's a lot more mature than other things and like said, it's darker. Although it has vampires in here, and I hate the over use of vampires recently, I don't mind in your story.
Now I'm not going to go through a whole nit-pick thing here but I will point out one error regarding your comma/period placement that I continued to see throughout your piece a few times.
Here's one example:
“In fact, it feels like your already gone.” he sighed happily.

Here you need a comma after gone instead of a period because the quote is still being described.
"In fact, it feels like you're already gone," he sighed happily.
See the difference?
Alright, that's all for now, don't be afraid to ask me again to review anything! I'll be happy to do it!

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Whoa!! This was awesome!
OK so this was dark, sexy, and mysterious!! Bring on the Heat!! Hahah. Anyway. I loved it!
Yeah try to use a variation of words, otherwise it gets very repetative. This definatly has a different feel than Twilight, more...mature I guess.
Lex seems like a real keeper (<--Sarcastic)
I hope you go on to tell us how she ended up this guys prisoner. I can't wait!!

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