I would be a good, short song if it were real. It sounds more like a poem though. :3 Because it makes me twitchy, you have to capitalize those words and fix the other word mistakes you made. Other then that, good job! Keep it up!
And I vow oath to this creed and all who are within it, to protect and value them all. -Altorian Guard Recruit Ceremony
I rated! :] I think this goes better within the lyric poetry genre. This is a beautifully written song. I really like the last lines! To get this moved to lyric poetry, just ask a person who is the color "green". Yep, well this was very good! It flowed very well! Keep writing!
^.8 ~Skyy.
Come sail the stars with me Through the sky not through the sea Come sail the stars with me Take me hand and make believe Come sail the stars with me Through the sky not through the sea Come sail the stars with me Take me hand and make believe~JT Lloyd
