Just a couple of haiki.

Inspiration

12:30 AM,
Locked in with the best of friends:
Me, myself and I.

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Acne

While writing, I pick
At the red bumps on my face
And, oh crap, they bleed.

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Aura

Standing next to her,
In the cloud of her perfume,
His breathing speeds up.

Ooh! Haikus! Or is it really "haiki" as you said? Meh, I haven't a clue.

I really like the first one, using the time for a line. It's not something I commonly see in haikus(haiki), mainly because a lot of people get sucked into the whole opinion that nature's the only thing they can be about. I seriously did a poll at my school, I'm not kidding with this; the majority of people said they had to be about nature.

Generally silly, some nice ideas, and in haikus(haiki) there's not much grammar errors, less room for spelling errors, and clarity is usually a given. I have nothing bad to say about this. Not that that's a bad thing, but it's...wierd. Short poetry just does that. Again, it's not bad, just a little...wierd, for some reason.

I'm getting off topic. The pieces are fantastic, with some good themes and some smiles. So keep it up, and have a lucky day!

Hello!

Haha, Haiki! Were you by any chance involved with the discussion thread for the first event and the major war about what the plural of Haiku was?

Anyway, well done. The first one was your Olympic entry no?
They are all three very good. Haiki are really nice to write because there is little room for mistakes. You just can't explore feelings when writing them because they are so short.
I like the titles, they added another dimension to the haiki and gave you an idea of what was going to happen, but then you twisted the idea and gave us something different. Like the title Aura, I assumed that you would write about something mythical and strange. But you percieved the Aura as a cloud of perfume.

Anyway, Well Done!
Keep Writing,
~Lydia