In the world of dreams

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Sometimes after stressful days I come back home and go upstairs and drop everything and just write my heart out. The other day was one of those days, and after bleeding all that ink out of my soul I read this passage out loud to myself and really liked it. Just the other hour I thought to myself that someone else might enjoy this, so here I am, posting it up on YWS. Enjoy! -Hiadel

~ sexual, don't read if you hate that crap.

I want to make love right now to the woman sitting across from me on the sofa. Everyone else at the party has gone outside to watch some punks performing some stupid dare out by the poolside, leaving us alone inside the house. When we meet that night we really hit it off. She told me that she was big on literature and hated vampires. Hearing all of that made my jaw drop. "Me too!" I exclaimed with the biggest smile I've had all day as we got into a heated discussion of just how terrible twilight really was.

Now we were all alone and I decieded to risk it and go for the gold. I stood up and sat next to her on the couch, motioning her closer, into my arms. She realized what I was asking and seemed to want it also. Without missing a beat we glued our lips together and started making out. After a few minutes she started to tug at my shirt buttons. I pulled her hands away and said "Not here, the others will be right back." She just looked at me and said with a smile "Well I guess we need to get out of here!" Grabbing me by the hand she led me out of the party and we started to run down the subdivision and into the nearby woods. After a few minutes of walking through the woods we stopped at this clearing in the forest covered with grass and lit overhead by the starry sky. We stopped and cradled each other in our arms. I looked into her eyes as the moon above reflected off of them. Her whole face was putting me into a trance that I was happily falling to my death in.

"Hiadel, if I let you make sweet love to me, will you promise me that you will respect me? Will you promise to pour affection into me so that by the end I'll have drowned in it? All I want is your love and affection."

"Yes! I promise! your eyes light up my world tonight. Tonight I feel as if I have all the love in the world bottled up inside of me and if I didn't pour all of it into you it would certainty explode inside of me. All I want is someone to pour love into. I don't want to break hearts, I want to make them. My heart has been torn apart far too many times to know that."

Tired of holding back we collapsed onto the grass and locked bodies. Our lips hugged like friends seeing each other for the first time in ages. We kissed and kissed until we ran out of space on our faces and necks to cover with love. Deciding to go deeper, I unbuttoned my shirt as she tore off her pink blouse, revealing her lovely flowery bra. She saw me notice her bra and tore it off and threw it onto a nearby stump, proclaiming "Oh, silly me, I forgot about that barricade." I started then to kiss her down her chest line. When I reached her breasts, I encompassed them with my tongue and licked them. She had her head back on the grass, groaning hard while taking in all the pleasure. As I moved from one side of her cheat to another, I noticed how hard her nipples were. As I playfully rolled my tongue over them they felt like heresy kisses. They were so hard and delicious that I was tempted to eat them right off of her.

Eventually I rolled my tongue down her belly and let her have a go on me. We flipped over on the grass and she started to smother me with her lips. Her kisses that were now hard pressed against my chest only helped to make my already strong boner almost impossible to hold onto. We both exhausted ourselves in the next few minutes and just laid there underneath the moonlight. She laid her head on my bare chest and said to me "Hiadel thank you ever so much for drowning me. It really took my breath away." She continued to speak, but I couldn't understand anymore of it. I glanced down again at her and noticed that she had actually dozed off on me. Right then I wish I could have gone to sleep also. She must be dreaming of me, and it hurt me that I couldn't be there with her as well. We would be flying across tonight's star lit sky on a magic carpet in her dream, bundled together. Holding her in my arms I'd tell her that I'd always love her, even when the sun came up the next day and ended our magical journey. I'd scream it to the world that I wanted to love forever because all my life love has been cooped up inside of me. The moment it starts to leak out the rest wants to explode out of me, and the pressure I'm feeling right now would kill any normal man. What is a lover supposed to do?


So that's it. I was focusing on descriptions and passion-embedding, so please don't go on about how bad the plot is (I kinda said fuck it to the plot in the first paragraph). Just keep in mind that this was just for fun and is meant more for meaning than anything else. Isn't that what writing is all about anyway?

~Hiadel
Writing is the magical release of emotion from your fingertips. Why on earth do people wish to be wizards when you have writing!




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"Me too!" I exclaimed with the biggest smile I've had all day as we got into a heated discussion of just how terrible Twilight really was.
Very terrible indeed, my friend.

"Hiadel, if I let you make sweet love to me, will you promise me that you will respect me? Will you promise to pour affection into me so that by the end I'll have drowned in it? All I want is your love and affection."
How does she know his name? I was under the assumption that they just met.

"Yes! I promise! Your eyes light up my world tonight. Tonight I feel as if I have all the love in the world bottled up inside of me and if I didn't pour all of it into you it would certainty explode inside of me. All I want is someone to pour love into. I don't want to break hearts, I want to make them. My heart has been torn apart far too many times to know that."
Once again, I thought they just met! How does he love her such much this quick? I thought he was just -excuse my language- looking for a good fuck?

Our lips hugged like friends seeing each other for the first time in ages.
I love this sentence.

"Oh, silly me, I forgot about that barricade."
Haha, I loved this line.

"Hiadel, thank you ever so much for drowning me. It really took my breath away."


Muwahahaha! That was amazing! I loved it, and though it was rather short, it kept me interested. I'll be looking out for you, Hiadel! You and your amazing work.

Big kiss, class dismissed!
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Wow, that's the kinda review I like!

This was kinda a good fantasy of mine, so I probably misstepped when I made her assume my name. I wasn't out just for a good fuck though.

Other than that, I really liked that review! It had a lot of taste to it.
Writing is the magical release of emotion from your fingertips. Why on earth do people wish to be wizards when you have writing!



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