Too low to feel low anymore.

As I mentioned on your other lyrics, I like that one more. That's not very encouraging, I know, but I do know why I like the other one more and hopefully this review will be much more helpful than the other one.

You seem to have gone to great pains to rhyme here, I'd suggest you reverse all that, the rhyme is taking away from the lyrics. They make the lines sound childish, a little weak, while I know - as from your other lyrics - you can do much better than that. This also has less substance, I'm left wondering what it was about and even though I've read it a few times it's entirely forgettable.

I'd suggest trying it a little more naturally, give it some room to breathe and expand on what you have here - minus the rhyme. I think you have a good base, but it needs to feel like more before I can have a real opinion on it. I know you can do this, most certainly, because I've seen you do it. The question is how, as I've said I'd expand; your verses could stand to be longer, compared to your chorus, as your chorus takes up all the space right now. When something takes up all the space, it also takes up all the attention. Your chorus is central and important, but it should be more memorable, and it shouldn't drown your verses.

If you change this, please tell me, I'd love to look at it again. I know you can make this much better than it is, I look forward to the end product.