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Pacific_Sky14
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Sun Feb 14, 2010 7:04 pm
Pacific_Sky14 says... · Sun Feb 14, 2010 7:04 pm
Took a look out my door
Found myself wanting more
All I have is a string of hope
There is more I'm asking for
More.

Sketching memories all over again
Maybe everything could be clear, then
The rain would start falling thin
And keep me from staying in

So tired of missing him, so sick
Stay strong-maybe words can fix
They say Love never let's go and It
Has me wanting what I've always wanted

Took a look out my door
Found myself wanting more
All I have is a string of Hope
There is more I'm asking for
More.
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Come sail the stars with me
Through the sky not through the sea
Come sail the stars with me
Take me hand and make believe
Come sail the stars with me
Through the sky not through the sea
Come sail the stars with me
Take me hand and make believe~JT Lloyd
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Tenyo
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Sun Feb 14, 2010 9:48 pm
Tenyo says... · Sun Feb 14, 2010 9:48 pm
Awesome!

I read the first verse and thought "Oh dear, this is going to need work," but after reading to the end, the first verse makes a lot of sense. The only issue is that I had to link it to Kingdom Hearts, so certain lines may seem out of place to people who aren't familiar with the game. I'm assuming that's what it is based on.

I like your use of colour too. Coloured font in poetry can seem quite amaturish, but you've pulled it off. Good work :)
We were born to be amazing.
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I lingered round them, under that benign sky: watched the moths fluttering among the heath and harebells, listened to the soft wind breathing through the grass, and wondered how any one could ever imagine unquiet slumbers for the sleepers in that quiet earth.
— Emily Bronte, Wuthering Heights