Heartache

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Heartache is all I feel while you feel happiness and pride,
I sit and cry well you laugh and shine.
You think its all alright now that I'm gone out of you're life
well I have something to say and that is today is the last day
that you will hear me say goodbye.

Look out the window and there you were sitting on the grass but I was
not there holding you're hand and smiling when you looked at me she was
the love of you're life is what you called her and now you call me a mistake and
a regret that you wish you had never made

I close the blinds shut off all the lights and start to write my last goodbye
to my Dear last love...

"I was always there for you by you're side when you woke up I was there, when you were sick I was there, and when you said i love you i was there to say I love you too. But you left me all alone on the dark night in the middle of the street and the last thing i ever heard from you was "I hate you, you were my only mistake, you're kisses and you're hugs meant nothing to me and I only loved you for her to love me." and now I see what you have meant so my last four words to you are I love you and Goodbye."

I put the note on my bed for you to find when you came to get you're things and to tell me goodbye..When you arrived you knocked on my door you're plan was all set but once you opened that door you saw something that wasn't planned, A knife on the floor a note on the bed, and me on the floor with cuts on my arms a slit on my throat and a word carved into my arm that said "you were my world" you got down right beside me grabbed my hand and started crying. But as i watched from above i smiled once more whispered I love you and moved on to above.

I told you I would die for you and that's what I have done...
"Best friends come and go..but Sisters are always there"




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Hmm! I really liked this. The only thing I see that I can criticize about:) is that towards the end the lines were very, very long and it kills the flow. I enjoyed this! PM me if you need any serious critiques,
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I say Wolf, for all wolves are not of the same sort; there is one kind with an amenable disposition – neither noisy, nor hateful, nor angry, but tame, obliging and gentle, following the young maids in the streets, even into their homes. Alas! Who does not know that these gentle wolves are of all such creatures the most dangerous!
— Charles Perrault