chuck and patti 4 ever

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charlie was a quiet boy
he stayed inside while the others played
they never really noticed
why charlie never came outside

he drew pictures of his dreams
on the borders of the tests in school
his mother never noticed
that charlie never cried

boys will be boys
as girls will be girls
at least its what we're told
as if we were lied to
open our eyes and notice the little things screaming in the corner
the little things right in front of our eyes
little hi
big goodbye

he took a car to the cavern
and he started the engine
he watched himself in the mirror
and never noticed the good inside

he looked at the stars
and at the space between
the connection to everything
and the ties that he severed

boys will be boys
as girls will be girls
at least its what we're told
as if we were lied to
open our eyes and notice the little things screaming in the corner
the little things right in front of our eyes
little hi
big goodbye

he took one last look at the town
he memorized the lights and sounds
he left a note to his mother
and then charlie was gone

charlie was a quiet boy
he never told a lie, ally
he learned of love
and was taught to hate

boys will be boys
as girls will be girls
at least its what we're told
as if we were lied to
open our eyes and notice the little things screaming in the corner
the little things right in front of our eyes
little hi
big goodbye
-zenjoy




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hmmm good song but the chorus boys will be boys as girls will be girls confuses me.
work on that
my advice to good song writing is...
1. have a peice of paper and write what the song is goin to be about like the theme.
2. write a story line for the song.
3. turn it into lyrics and a chorus.
4. add a tune and some instruments.




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not to be offensive, but that might be the worst songwriting advice i have heard in a long time.
i never 'plan' my songs, they happen. i'm not a writer, i'm a gateway between the songs and you
-zenjoy



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