Leaf?

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StrangeGirl
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Sat Feb 06, 2010 3:57 pm
StrangeGirl says... · Sat Feb 06, 2010 3:57 pm
I'm not quite sure what to call this, so I'll just go with a tentative "leaf". It's a haiku—it's supposed to be short.
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The single leaf hangs
A bitter frost surrounds him
He is all alone
My mind is my favorite place.
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Sionarama
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Sat Feb 06, 2010 3:59 pm
Sionarama says... · Sat Feb 06, 2010 3:59 pm
A little short, don't you think? This type of poem is called a haiku.
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Sat Feb 06, 2010 4:08 pm
In_the_Moonlight says... · Sat Feb 06, 2010 4:08 pm
Hi StrangeGirl, I really liked this. The syllables were all the right amount and even with something so short you managed to have it make sense.

A bitter frost surrounds him


This has to be my favorite line because it describes him/leaf the most and really brings out the most emotion. I guess like imagery, it was good :).

~~Mo~~

P.S. I love seeing any haikus 'cuz to me i find it hard to describe something in 17 syllables.
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