The Background

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Hiding, but not quite hiding.
My words slipping in to a gray
and now i seem to be disappearing.
Pulled in to a fog thats not clearing
and no one can see me
up against this wall.

Because im fading into the background
and invisibles my thing.
a shadow on call
on this gray wall
Im fading into the background.

Just 'Cause you think i can't See
the crap that you spew about me
And, Doll
im so done with it all

Because im fading in to the background
and invisibles my thing
a shadow on call
on this gray wall
im fading in to the background.

Soon enough i will appear out of this blizzard
and you wont say a thing.
You'll Try to hide
Your lies about me
but you can't be anywhere i can't see.

Because your fading into the background...

I will be in the background
because invisibles my thing
Shadow on call
On this grey wall
Im fading
Im fading
Im fading
Into the background.

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Little cliche' i know but it was cool when i first thought of it.
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O thin men of Haddam,/Why do you imagine golden birds?/Do you not see how the blackbird/Walks around the feet/Of the women about you?
-Wallace Stevens




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Hello, Emoticon! Thanks for posting your lyrics. Which instrument do you play?

I noticed a few punctuation errors in your song. Writing lyrics is like writing poetry, format wise-- it's customary to capitalize the first letter of each line. I went through and corrected that, and some other things. Let me know what you think.

Hiding, but not quite hiding. 
My words slipping in to a gray 
And now I seem to be disappearing. 
Pulled in to a fog that's not clearing 
And no one can see me 
Up against this wall. 
 
Because I'm fading into the background 
And invisible's my thing. 
A shadow on call 
On this gray wall 
I'm fading into the background. 
 
Just 'cause you think I can't see  
The crap that you spew about me 
And, Doll 
I'm so done with it all. 
 
Because I'm fading in to the background 
And invisibles my thing 
A shadow on call 
On this gray wall  
I'm fading in to the background. 
 
Soon enough I will appear out of this blizzard 
And you won't say a thing. 
You'll try to hide  
Your lies about me  
But you can't be anywhere I can't see. 
 
Because you're fading into the background... 
 
I will be in the background  
Because invisible's my thing  
Shadow on call 
On this grey wall 
I'm fading 
I'm fading  
I'm fading 
Into the background. 

I really like the way you used rhyme in this. It's there, but not too strong-- it's not overwhelming or distracting. It makes the flow really natural. I'd really love to hear this to music. It's lovely!
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uh...well i actually dont play an instrument... i know its sad but yeah
O thin men of Haddam,/Why do you imagine golden birds?/Do you not see how the blackbird/Walks around the feet/Of the women about you?
-Wallace Stevens




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hey doll! (lol u use tht all the timeXD)
any way i love the feeling these lyrics give off
im wondering......(you dont have to tell me on your post) but does this have to do with your feelings or anything? if so you know im only a phone call away!
anyway again i like it! :elephant:
ttyl
lylas♥
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Awww. doll. of course it is but its not about you.
O thin men of Haddam,/Why do you imagine golden birds?/Do you not see how the blackbird/Walks around the feet/Of the women about you?
-Wallace Stevens



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