Just keep dreamin on

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Just Keep Dreamin’ On

Verse 1- Songs written in a notebook
Bein’ teased by girls tryin to be cool
Sitten’ home alone on a Friday night
Wishin’ that my life could change

Chorus- Dream on when the water floods
Never let em get the best of you
Keep dreamin’ and make em come true
Just keep dreamin’ that’s all you have to do

Verse 2- Boys breakin’ your heart
Don’t ever let em get the best of you
They say you aren’t pretty or cool
But we girls know, boys like to drool!

Chorus- Dream on when the water floods
Never let em get the best of you
Keep dreamin’ and make em come true
Just keep dreamin’ that’s all you have to do

Hook- Keep dreamin on
They won’t get to you
If you believe, believe
In your dreams

Chorus- Dream on when the water floods
Never let em get the best of you
Keep dreamin’ and make em come true
Just keep dreamin’ that’s all you have to do

Ending: Songs written in a notebook
Boys breakin your heart
Dream on when the water floods
Just keep dreamin on
Bittersweet embrace
Fit or run in place
Don't leave me so thirsty
Or else hush this hurry
Weight on me
Weighs more than me
So wait with me and we'll stop crying


~Bittersweet by Flyleaf




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I like everything but these two lines.

fireflight61 wrote:They say you aren’t pretty or cool
But we girls know, boys like to drool!


The topic is pretty cool, it's been done many times but I felt you did it some justice. Keep writing.

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I enjoyed this very much. The concept is nice and sweet. You had a good flow and rhythm to your words. Good job. I do have one suggestion though. I feel that you should make your lyrics longer. Maybe add some more into the chorus. Maybe about finally getting that boy you like to talk to you or something like that. Besides that I feel that this has a lot of potential. Great job! :D
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This was great, maybe you should do some stuff like what the others said, oooh you should send this to someone famous, just a suggestion, it would be pretty cool. :elephant: :elephant: :elephant: :elephant: :D :D :thud: :thud:
Sorrow lasts through this night
I'll take this piece of you,
and hold for all eternity
For just one second I felt whole... as you flew right through me.


~Sorrow by Flyleaf



Irrigation of the land with seawater desalinated by fusion power is ancient. It's called 'rain'.
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