Chained: edited

Chained
Chained to the fear,keeping you in the same spot for so long
Chained to the grudges, keeping your relationships from growing
Your shame has taken control of your life
The lies you can’t seem to stop telling
The addiction, you can’t make go away
You're a slave to the depression and to the pain
Its time to break free of the chains
There not doing anything but holding you back from life
Break free, break free
One moment, one minute, and one day at a time

I liked this poem. The repetitiveness of it really grabbed me (I could make a corny joke here pertaining to your title, but, well, just be grateful I caught myself in time , I'm turning into Mom- but is that really a bad thing?... sorry, I think I'm falling back from the subject, *ahem*)

Just a minor suggestion. This line here,

Chained to the depression and to the pain

It doesn't really... flow. A bit bumpy. Maybe if you changed it to

Chained to the depression and
Chained to the pain

Just letting it be on the next line helps it roll easily off the tongue.
But other than that, good work!

Hi its me Forest! I'll be your reviewer today!

Chained to the fear that has kept you in the same spot for so long

I think since it's a poem it would flow more if you wrote it like this: Chained to the fear, keeping you in the same spot

Chained to the grudges that has kept your relationship from growing

Also change it to this and it may read better: Chained to grudges that has kept your relationship from growing

Chained to the shame that you’ve let take control of your life

take out "that"

Chained to the lies you can’t seem to stop telling

Take out "seem to" it doesn't flow if its in there

There not doing anything but holding you back from life

It should be, "They're not doing..." instead of there

Overall I really liked this. It made me think of all the chains holding me back, and it really was touching. It was great Sarah great job!

This was really well written!
Its so true and i love how you make the reader realize it!
My favorite line would have to be:
Chained to the depression and to the pain; Because isn't the complete and total truth.
I believe that all of us are changed to some sort of pain and depression
and its time that we all break free!

Hi there Sarah. I'm Conrad.

I have to say that the repetitive way you start your first seven lines or so doesn't do anything for me. It just kind of bangs along and feels off-setting. Also, you need to keep an eye on the tenses that you are using. A couple of times, you use 'has' when you should use 'have', and it really shows. The poem is thrown off balance a bit by this.

There is a nice foundation you can build on here. You've just got to fix the repetitive nature of the first part, and tighten up your tenses as well. PM me if you have any questions or comments.

Good job, and good luck.

-Conrad Rice

Chained
Chained to the fear that has kept you in the same spot for so long
Chained to the grudges that has kept your relationship from growing
Chained to the shame that you’ve let take control of your life
Chained to the lies you can’t seem to stop telling
Chained to the addiction that you can’t make go away

Repetition is good and catches a readers attention/sets the flow, but don't over-use it, or it gets just abit boring.

Chained to the depression and to the pain

Like above reviews say, this doesn't quite...work. it's different in wording from what you've written above, and is abit bumpy.

Its time to break free of the chains
There not doing anything but holding you back from life
Break free, break free of the chains
One moment, one minute, and one day at a time

This flows together well, once you read it fully through... but the second line sounds just a bit thrown into it, and drags out a little longer than the following/beforehand, upsetting the flow slightly.

Very good. You're repetition caught me from the first glance. Though I think it would help your flow and rhythm if you changed you wording around in a few lines... this was still packed with emotion and was well written. Please Keep Writing!!

~Lukan