Universius

UNIVERSIUS

With time's passage our forms decay
Entropy's hand is the order by which we abide
With it we return to the darkness incarnate
And the God of our dreams awaits
Laughing at the world's woe

We've all peaked at the true nature of existence
That infinite abyss so alien and eternal
Seeming chaos that is yet perfectly wrought
And before which you tremble
But in death we all laugh with God
At those still living

I'm learning about poetry in English right now, so hopefully this review isn't terrible.

This poem is really good. I like how there's no meter because it gives you a chaotic feeling. This poem says to me that we all worry about what happens after we die that we don't live our lives.

I must admit, that I had to look up what Entropy was; but, now that I understand what it means, I like how you used it in this poem. Our lives aren't exact, so things just happen freely.

The only problem is I don't understand the title. Not that it matters or anything, since the content is the main focus. Maybe the title is just over my head.

Anyway, I really liked your poem. Short, sweet, and to the point is refreshing. PM me when you submit another poem to this site.

[mj]

Thanks for reading, glad you liked it! And yeah, the title doesn't really mean anything in particularly, just a word I made up that the tone of the poem (in my head, at least).