Fall into Eternity

This is a song I vomited in about 7 minutes on notepad as I was waiting for my pirated copy of microsoft office to download.

It is entitled:

Fall into Eternity
Would love to hear thoughts on this!



Verse 1:
Lost in your own imagination
You have all the time for procrastination
Your world, your rules
Proclaim yourself as emperor
Knight yourself with your own sword
Onlooking we await your...

Chorus 1:
Fall!
Fall!
Fall into eternity
an endless pit of misery
oh, how we love the irony
The horror in your eyes
as all the light inside you dies

Verse 2:
With an iron fist and forked tongue you rule
Onlooking your kingdom built on lies
Delude yourself, flush out the truth
Lie so much that you become the deceived
Decaying into sheer madness to your own surprise
Onlooking we await your...

Chorus 2:
Fall!
Fall!
Fall into eternity
an endless pit of misery
oh, how we love the irony
The horror in your eyes
as all the light inside you dies

Bridge:
Watch!
Feel!
Fall!
Crumble!

Verse 3:
Your rotting kingdom
The walls of ignorance decay
Foundations cracking under the weight
Fall on your sword, no one shall take the blame
Scramble for a scapegoat but no one is to be found
Always so quick to dump the blame
And now you have...

Chorus 3:
Fallen!
Fallen!
Fallen into eternity
an endless pit of misery
oh, how we loved the irony
the horror in your eyes
as all the light inside you died

Hello, BogWraith: I am a song writer myself. I really like the theme of the song, but I can't get the pitch of the song, because I don't know what Genre it is. Maybe if you were to state the genre in the song (at the top) I would understand the rhythm of the song more. Also, the song is pretty short, that would only last about 1 1/2 Minutes in run time. Otherwise I'd like to say that just for seven minutes you did pretty good.

Hi, The song would last 5 minutes at the least in run-time as it is a slow grinding metal song, the lyrics are done in a deep dragged out gutteral style as seen with 'Gorefest'.

The guitar work is B tuning, so very low and grunting/grinding.

Each line takes at least 10 seconds to vocally perform.

I really, really liked these lyrics!! I don't think it would be in a genre I usually listen to, but loved it anyway it made me wanna get out of my chair and scream it to the whole world ^_^