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Wow. I really liked that. It really hit home for me. It was very well written and really want to read more lyrics from you! Keep on writing them songs!

Yeah I liked it, do you write the music too? I would love to hear the song, think it would sound awesome. To me it was a bit of an acoustic, but whatever you think,it's your song, and like I said, it's good, you should feel proud of yourself. I would love to hear it as a complete song!

I love the idea behind the lyricism, very creative. It is, of course, emo and depressing as every other song out there. But something about your chorus hit me hard.

heyalyrae wrote:* hear me now
[b]moving backwards[/b] It would work best if you said, 'I'm moving backwards'
my world is falling apart
can’t you see me crying alone
crying alone (To the tune I have in my head, this is unnecessary.)
begging for you to save me
can you hear me *

It is a bit messy in the spelling/grammar area, but I'll let it go.

GRADE: B

very nice piece, i like the repetition of "hear me" throughout the song, i could see this being a very heartfelt song reaching out for help, i can really feel the pain. good job.

i really liked it. it was very touching..

I liked this very much as well! I can really feel the emotion. I can almost hear this song in my head, although it probably doesn't sound like that. I wish I could hear it how you wrote it! Not sure what else there is to say but good job! ;D