Survive

This is a song I wrote when I was 12(I think). PLEASE review. Not quite sure what genre but the chords for guitar are basically just D and G. If you want to hear it, here's a link to it on youtube[btw i cant sing lol!] http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6aOkQrBP ... rofilepage


V1
Stop your crying, everything is alright
I know in time you will see the light
And you may feel like you're the only one
But I've been there too and survived it more than once

V2
You always smile, but it never reaches your eyes
And they don't know what you feel inside
Your heart is aching, you want someone to love
You for who you are, it would be enough

Bridge:
Don't let those things that they say get to you
They just don't know what you're going through

Chorus:
Keep breathing cause someday you will see the light
Keep smiling cause everything will be alright
Keep moving on, it'll get better in time
I know you will survive

V3
They say love is a battlefield, and you just can't win
But you keep on fighting, and you're never giving in
And you know the truth and you must accept that
Life ain't fair, as a matter of fact

Bridge:
It's downright cruel and it'll hit you hard
But that's when you find out how strong you are

Chorus:
Keep breathing cause someday you will see the light
Keep smiling cause everything will be alright
Keep moving on it'll get better in time
I know you will survive

Bridge:
You've got the strength
You've got the will
You'll find the courage
Cause you've got the skill

Chorus2:
Keep breathing cause someday you will see the light
Keep smiling cause everything will be alright
Keep moving on, it'll get better in time, yeah
Keep singing this song cause you will succeed
There's hope out there if you just believe
Keep holding on to what you feel inside
I know you will survive

I really like this song, it's uplifting without being cheesy or preachy which is a difficult thing to balance in songwriting. My favorite part is :

Keep breathing cause someday you will see the light
Keep smiling cause everything will be alright
Keep moving on, it'll get better in time
I know you will survive
V3
They say love is a battlefield, and you just can't win
But you keep on fighting, and you're never giving in
And you know the truth and you must accept that
Life ain't fair, as a matter of fact
Bridge:
It's downright cruel and it'll hit you hard
But that's when you find out how strong you are


That's a really strong part there. The only criticism I have is that in the last bridge you might wantta add more, maybe something like,

they tell you to stop,
but you don't give in,
when you doubt in the night,
remember then

I don't know that tune you've envisioned but that's just an example. Tha rest is awesome.

Thanks to both of you!

Wow! Really good Job! My favorite part was; "They say love is a battlefield, and you just can't win...But you keep on fighting, and you're never giving in" You get a Gold Star my friend!