All that I do...

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All that I do I do for you. What my life was like before you I can't remember. I don't know why I do these things or even why I'm writing this. I just am.

You're the reason for my mood swings. My newfound confidence. My laughter. My tears.
You're the reason I stay up all night waiting for the phone to ring so I can hear your voice.
You're the reason for my stubbornness. My compromise. My peace. My fears.
You're the reason I download love icons and write bad poetry. Why I haven't slept in three days and don't feel a bit tired.

Just for a smile from your face. A laugh. Just to hear your voice I'd do anything. Say anything. Promise anything and keep that promise. I'd fly to the moon and back for you if I could.

I keep this to myself and write this for the world to see because no one knows your name. But I carry your name with me. I carry it in my heart.
Your journey began before you manifested in physical form here on this planet and will not cease when that physical representation of yourself is no longer capable of interacting with this world.
~Silver Ravenwolf (Wiccan Author)

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This is a very sweet poem that I'm sure we can all sympathize with. I must say, though, that the topic is a bit overused, and some of the phrases could be done without.

Sweeney_Todd wrote:I'd fly to the moon and back for you if I could.


This phrase is a bit stereotypical, especially if you've seen the Christmas movie, "It's a Wonderful Life." It could be replaced with a phrase something like, "I'd fast for a month and walk the Sahara for you." You know . . . something that you, yourself made up.

Sweeney_Todd wrote:I keep this to myself and write this for the world to see because no one knows your name. But I carry your name with me. I carry it in my heart.


This is a very original line with a lot of meaning. Definitely keep it, although the "but" could be taken out.

Read your poetry aloud, add some commas, and this will be wonderful!

Please note that all advice I am giving is completely opinionated, and you may disregard this completely if you so please.



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