Bring Science to Her Knees

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O, what a gilded mesh you have woven with your robbery; wrong thefts picked tenderly through the finery of literature. Bring your spoils to the craftsman and mend, and bend, a dress of mail to wear over your soft and tender poet's heart. Vagrant! You cowards know what a heinous sword you have made the inky pen, a traitorously singing lark. Writer, even you know what chaos and murder your wretched pen will start, and yet you must speak. You must write your truths, knowing they will be the match to burn pyres of living things.

What was your intent in the inking, for wretched was the scrapping away of the gleam of the world, the tearing away at magik; yet, still, you claim to be appreciative always of the verbal Sirens. Even as you murdered them, you were wooed by the sirens who sing and lure and truly convince us that we who are now mere and mortal men can still feel what immortal words have felt. Glory to the lasting language! For whilst the penning hand sat at last finally still, and rotted, as minds rotted, the words they inked breathe. The Ancients leave us wreaked with their wisdom!

Poet! Poet! Remember the Harpy, she who stirs us with dreams of flight, and dreams of lusty emotions, of feathery flighty battle and life! Harpies, poets, mere men who will pick our bones after we have fallen to our deaths. Small man, your ancient kin and blood, with their dissection of themselves, cut away their immortality and raped their own dreams. We were once a People, a Race. Now we are a fading dream.

Where is the phoenix to fly from the ashes of the fantastic!

Will the fawn and nymph sing over your temporal graves? Nay, for your spirits study a cold and lifeless corpse; saying, 'Yes, we are wise. All is as it should be." This is your crutch, this is your misdirected longing and loneliness. This is how you disguise your guilt. Your shame at being earth-bound, death bound. Ashes to ashes, dust to dust. Once, there were fawns, the spirits were there also, merry and dancing. Once, Man ruled.

Bring science to her knees, in sacred lore of heart and magic and the craftsmanship of the stars that we will die to believe. Bring science to her knees. Science killed magic; science tore the harpy in half, saying to one half, "Woman" and to the other half, "Bird." Science left the woman sinking in her breast for flight and the bird crying in its heart for love. Science killed dreamers and dissected dreams.

And yet, O and yet, it was that innocent curiosity to know the mechanism of miracle, it was that guileless wonder that gave this bitter poet's hand a pen, and said “You, now Philosopher.”
Where there is No Love, there is No Question.

A dream shared becomes reality, a dream alone is a nightmare.

"She tastes lyke raiyn
and sumtimes kiwi-fruit;
and wunce...
she tasted lyke a pen-ny." <3




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Well, Mandorelute, you are indeed very talented. :] It was extremely difficult to target anything in your piece that stuck out as something with error. Gramatically, I could find virtually nothing. However, between the first and second paragraphs I became confused about your attitude towards the writer, or the scientist. It appears as though at first your main character feels hatred towards the writer or poet, and this shows consistency thoughout, yet by the end it seems like the scientist is to blame ("Science killed dreamers and dissected dreams"). Are they one-in-the-same? And do not writers often create and reform the magik you tell of? Perhaps I misunderstand.

Science killed magik; science tore the harpy in half, saying to one half, "Woman" and to the other half, "Bird." Science left the woman sinking in her breast for flight and the bird crying in its heart for love.


That was absolutely remarkable. It demonstrated great imagery and definitely helped the reader to understand how science has left it's mark on fantastical things. It sounds nothing like what a younger person in this time period would have the capability of writing, and for that I commend you.

Other than that I have nothing more to offer, so keep writing and try different styles! If this is the one for you, so be it, because it was by far one of the most interesting and eloquent pieces I've read in a good while.
In me thou see'st the glowing of such fire,
That on the ashes of his youth doth lie,
As the deathbed whereon it must expire,
Consumed by that which it was nourished by.
(Exerpt from Shakespearean Sonnet Number 73)




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I just realized, I spelled "Grammatically", "Throughout" and "Its" wrong. I apologize.
In me thou see'st the glowing of such fire,
That on the ashes of his youth doth lie,
As the deathbed whereon it must expire,
Consumed by that which it was nourished by.
(Exerpt from Shakespearean Sonnet Number 73)



“Though lovers be lost, love shall not; And death shall have no dominion.”
— Dylan Thomas