I wrote this in about 2 minutes

If I don’t get what I want,
I walk around with rain stained eyes.
If I get exactly what I desire,
There is still darkness in the sky.

I can’t make up my mind,
It’s always changing.
I want this, I want that.
My heart is quickly breaking.

I want your love,
Don’t leave my side.
But I never want to see you again,
This is one distracting ride.

I want you now,
But that will change in an hour.
I’ll hate you then,
Is our love ever sour?

So I don’t know what I want,
But neither do you.
We’ll play it by ear together,
While we enjoy the view.

okay so i like the idea of your poem, in terms of its being a quick burst of emotion (which i often find myself having to do). you do a great job of showing your emotion, but i'm thinking it would be even more potent if you didn't include the rhyme scheme that you seem to be trying to use here. i think it appears a little too forced. i feel like if you just wrote quickly in your normal voice, the poem would be more effective and would better convey the chaos and confusion that often comes along with emotions like these. so other than the rhyming, good job.

First Impressions

Well the first issue with this poem, is that it feels like you wrote it in about two minutes. There is so little emotion behind it, and it seems like it was just thrown together in a rush. My first suggestion would be to slow down, sort out the message you want the poem to say, and focus on that. Right now you've got a lot going on, and it's all very sporadic and jumpy.

The next thing I notice is that it's a very "you" focused poem. Navel Gazing is a common issue with poetry about love or romance. The problem is, you aren't paying attention to the reader at all. Which! if it's a diary poem, this works. Writing for yourself is never a bad thing, however if you want people to take the piece of work seriously, you must write for them as well.

Rhyming

The rhyme in this poem is very forced. Line after line it feels as though you are choosing words not for their meaning, but simply because they rhyme with the words above them. It's not very effective, as after the first stanza it grows dull. Poetic Devices used in effective and inovative ways are a great asset to your poetry, and they will help really bring your ideas to life.

Imagery

Imagry in poetry is essential to creating an effective piece. Creating that picture in the readers mind that makes them feel it, rather than telling the reader that you feel it. Right now, we know by reading it that you're confused about a love situation, but we can't feel it with you. We know this, because you told us, but telling is not very effective, and in the end, it's very dull. We need to be brought into your mind, into the situation with you. As readers, you have to make us feel exactly what you're feeling. Show us the headache that you have, or the pain in your gut whenever you see this person. Show us what it feels like, using successful images.

Overall

I would love to see you focus on one idea, and build around that idea, rather than having several ideas bouncing around. Try to take one basic thing, and build on it using Poetic Device and Imagry to bring your reader into your world.

Best of luck

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