Gallery Of Glasses

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There's a gallery of glasses,
half empty of water,
displayed on my desk.
You told me water would help
to sober me up
and fight the pain of morning
when it comes.
I've been looking at them
blearily, for hours.
(They're not so funny now I'm not
sure I can make them sing,
I'm not sure I can make you sing,
if it must come to that,
or that you can make me sing, but)
I know I can fill another tall glass
drop
by
drop
by
drop
by
drop,
and I can watch the world
(its shrunken self)
distort itself
to fit my moon like some glass slipper.

I'll water my pillow before I sleep.
You seemed sure water's what I need,
but I'm terrified of flood.
I moved the sandbags to the shed,
so now I have to let it come,
succumb, succumb-
most of the earth is water, and it's
inviting me in.
"Just like moons and like suns,
With the certainty of tides,
Just like hopes springing high,
Still I'll rise."
-Maya Angelou




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I really like this. I guess you can't really review what you really like can you. Great job.

-Flower-
My reality comes to a close as I once again realize that you don't love me, and even if I love you with my everything you will never care.





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Hey Jasmine! June here! :D

I wish I could offer you some constructive criticism on this, but I can't. I found this extremely well written-- the structure and wording was absolutely beautiful.

Your language throughout this was very simplistic, which made for an easy, beautiful reading.

My favorite stanza is the last one-- it's an absolutely wonderful closing for this poem.

Keep it up, Jasmine. I love your poetry. :)

Juniper
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Making the simple complicated is commonplace; making the complicated simple, awesomely simple, that's creativity.
— Charles Mingus