Always better

This was written about a girl in my class that always has to one-up me, and she knows it.


As I stand on a platform,
I still look up at you.

As I try to speak,
your lips are quicker.

As I try to run,
your feet are faster.

I polish off my silver,
and you gloat about your gold.

When I feel so meek
you are so bold.

When I feel so small,
you are so proud.

Are you that evil,
or am I just a coward?

I can see through your lies,
I see the green eyed monster in your eyes.

Hi there!

I can see through your lies,

I see the green monster in your eyes.

I think you should break this up into three lines. It would look better as
I can see through your lies,
I see the green-eyed monster
in your eyes.

As I try to run,

your feet are faster.

You could switch it up with attempt instead of having try twice.

But then, that would kind of the pattern you have here...

As I try to speak,

your lips are quicker.



As I try to run,

your feet are faster.

When I feel so meek

you are so bold.



When I feel so small,

you are so proud.

Good job!