a letter to i—youth

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a letter to i—youth
IDEOLOGY

to the youth, i
fear not, [s]not[/s] be beguiled
for even obscured, don't day insecure

exit immersed excess of ego
physical explored, imagined ideal

implore and abide "delusion" manifesto
illusion identified surreal to belong
worry not, dream norms defy

to the youth I
BE
and that night the sky was blue

length, you are my enemy.




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Wow! Heavy political aggressiveness. Surely there are some things they get right!? :P We'll need every bit of ideology to make the world a better place! :D But then again, that's going to be another problem. People will always have different ideals and sometimes they will never meet.

I love how it almost "invites" other people to think and dream. And how it uplifts the idea that every ambitious delusion isn't impossible. Okay, I hope I'm not making a fool of myself... But that's how I understand it! :D Believe me, I had to rack my brains for every bit of comprehension... Gave me a headache but I LOVE 'cryptic' pieces.

Problem, I'm not sure i get this:


for even obscured, don't day insecure <-- "day"?! :[ im lost!


If you're speaking of the governance of the present generation, like i think you are... I think you mean that they can't hide everything because there are still people who see through appearances!? Haha! I don't know! :D

I LOVE the last lines and how you ended it with a firm stand! :D

implore and abide "delusion" manifesto <-- LOL! hear!hear! :D

illusion identified surreal to belong

worry not, dream norms defy



to the youth I

BE <-- standing ovation!!!
"Love is the black of cliches" ~bailecielo'09~




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Hello.

When I reviewed one of your other works your wordplay struck me. It seems to be the definitive characteristic of your writing. It adds something to your works. It makes it more powerful because as your topics are thought-provoking, the wordplay makes you think even further which makes this piece a challenge for the mind. In a good way that is. A piece that requires no brains to comprehend would be rather sad.

worry not, dream norms defy
Excellent lines. It simply injects spirit into the reader, it injects spirit into the youth.

Hmm... Agreeing with bailecielo on the day line. It's amazing though, she interpreted it in a different way and I have something else in my mind but there's the beauty in poetry... it allows ideas to flourish. Now what I thought on that line is that truth, when obscured will still have security with the youth. Ah wait, 'tis similar with bailecielo's idea. Anyway, a very interesting piece indeed.

--Knightly
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