Tarantula

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Are you allowed parodies in this forum? :S

Do you remember a flat,
Falcony?
Do you remember a flat?
And the snuffing and the coughing
of the sticks for a laughing,
And the bees that sneeze in the low amount of cheese
And the water that tasted of the pea,
and the shouts and the trouts of the old cub scouts,
(Under the stem of the dark balcony?)
Do you remember a flat, Falcony,
Do you remember a flat?
And the shouts and the trouts of the old cubscouts
who hadn't got a settee
and weren't sitting on any,
And the knife at the doors and Bin?
And Slip! Slop! Slap!
of the rap
of the hands to the coy and the joy
of the boy gone gushing
pushing
rushing
backing and flushing
snapping of a rapper to the trout
in and out-
and the ching chong chang of the lute
Do you remember a flat,
Falcony
do you remember a flat

Never drag
Falcony
Never drag
only the low crest slag
and legolas a deluge at the door
no sight
in the tools of the Falls where drools
The head
of the meat of the Bread to the light
No sight
but the gloom
of the flat watertool like DOOM
Last edited by Blift on Sun May 24, 2009 11:46 am, edited 1 time in total.




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i really like this.. the only thing i saw wrong was the spelling on one of the remembers at the beginig.

No sight

but the gloom

of the flat watertool like DOOM


this part is my favorite. the whole poem reminded me of times when you speak fasater and faster just to get it all out. When i was reading this in my head i just kept going faster and faster. the effact is absolutly amazing.
"The die has been cast. My destiny set. Now i have one question. Can I trust you?" ~??




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Haha I swear I corrected those spelling mistakes



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