Fade Away

-calm guitar playing, then silence-
Without you, my sun goes out
The deathly silence takes my shouts
Took away by Father Time
What did I do to deserve this crime?

-calm guitar playing again, followed by sounds of tears then more silence-

Plenty of fish in some sea
But the only one was taken from me
Silent night, Silent day
Forgotten as I Fade Away
-guitar plays again-

Hatred as I Fade Away
I can not go another day
Sadness as I Fade Away
Off on to my final days

-silent again-
Wish I may Wish I Might
Off to the world of night
Cries of help, cries of tears
No one listens; their all deaf ears

-guitar and bass get louder-

Tick, tock, tick, tock
Free the soul from faded lock
Happiness meets it's block
Time bombs tick, tock

-silence, then drums sound like bullets-
Stop what your doing, stop it now!
Too bad you may never see thou
Wrapped inside my dark black cloud
Fade Away inside your shroud

Fade Away
Fade Away
Fade Away
Fade your life Away

that was good! the only thing i would have to say really is the part that goes "Plenty of fish in some sea"
i think you should change "some" to "the"

otherwise, very powerful song. i hope someone could play it someday! :]

Rock? It better be rock! This song brought so much emotions of sadness and darkness. That's why I liked it! Also your rhyming was really good. The only thing what I think should be added should be:

-calm guitar playing, then silence-
Without you, my sun goes out
The deathly silence takes my shouts
Took away by Father Time
What did I do to deserve this crime?-----------MAYBE YOU SHOULD REPEAT "THIS CRIME" AGAIN OR MAKE IT ECHOING.

I wish I would know the melody for this then I would know how it goes better.

that was very good song, i agree that in the line "Plenty of fish in some sea" you should change some to the, i also think that after every verse you should repeat the last word or words to give it some more effect and in this line "No one listens; their all deaf ears" it seems like their all deaf ears doesn't really fit in with the pattern, i think it would sound better if you said "no one listens cause no one care"

other than that it is a very good song

Awesome song...tho a bit sad & depressing... I like it and i like how you combined lyrics from famous songs and changes it up a little and made them work and made your song more original... Also nice title and for the lyrics I think it needs a chorus or you need to make it clear what the chorus or the verse is beside that I lov it...