Realizing Somehting About Love

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Please tell me if this is the right board. I'm not quite sure.
Critques are welcomed.

Here goes:

Realizing Somehting About love

by: writergal

I loved him.
I loved him so much.
It was those times when I felt that the only person I could
ever love was him.He loved me, I loved him.
That was it.
I seemed to have forgotten about everthing and everyone else.
You know what they say, love is blind.
And I was truly blind.

When the moment came that he left me, he left me for another. I
felt horrible, like the world stopped moving. Like the clock
stopped ticking.

It was when I realized what I've become.
I stopped loving everyone else when I loved him.
I now know that I was wrong to do so.
I learned.

Love is not limited. Love more, the better. Never forget to

love your family, friends and more importantly, GOD.
Loving one is okay, but never stop there.
There are more that needs your love.

And that is why, through that lesson, I began loving more and
more. I started loving my family and friends again, I showed my
love for others by doing charity work which is eventually
became a hobby for my friends and I. I aslo loved GOD, once
more and he loved me more than always.

So go on, love your neighbors, love is unlimited.




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First off, WELCOME TO YWS! If you need me, just send a PM.

Is this a poem? If it is it's in the wrong section. There's a spot for Romantic Poetry here.

Um. If this is a poem, I'm no good at critiquing those. Sorry.

If you need help I'll be glad to help you!

MJ
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...and I'm now trying to create a user group based on the idea! Tell me if you're interested!




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Well, honestly, it wasn't meant to be a poem but I'm not really sure if it is.
I'm still trying to figure that out.




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I think it's kind of a poem. If it were a story it would be seperated into paragraphs, right? Well, it's pretty good and welcome to YWS.
"Can't stop, won't stop. I must be dreaming."




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Well, thanks!
But can anyone tell me how to move it to the Poetry section or something???



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