Without Reservations

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This is one of the first book reviews I've written, so I'd like a little bit of peer review before I ship it off to be published....

J.L. Langley’s novel, Without Reservation, takes the werewolf genre to a totally different level. Instead of having the classic werewolf horror genre, she turns it into a romance genre. At the beginning of the novel Chayton, a Native American veterinarian, finds his mate, Keaton, a blonde haired Caucasian teacher.
Together, Chay and “Little Bit” must fight against two different prejudices in order to live their lives. Not everyone in the community is happy about Chay dating a Caucasian. But even more people have a problem with them both being males. After several attempts on Keaton’s life, Chay and Keaton both must work together and face these problems head on, or risk losing each other.
The book has an interesting premise, gay werewolf lovers, a plot you don’t see too often. The book started off pretty good, decently paced and very interesting. About a third of the way through the book that changes, instead of being just a book focusing on the relationship and its problem, it turns into erotica. It seemed like after that point that there was a sex scene every couple pages. Even if you ignored the sex scenes, the book started to go downhill. Everything started to happen really fast, the attempts on Keaton’s life and his healing felt rushed. It didn’t have the amount of drama it needed. The ending of the book was also a little predictable and rushed.
Overall, the book is a cute read. If you’re looking for something to read on a Sunday afternoon, and don’t mind a bunch of sex scenes, then this is worth the couple dollars it costs. Don’t pick it up expecting a literary masterpiece, but check it out if you have a couple hours to burn and feel like reading about gay werewolves.
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Hello! Nice to meet you! My name is Ryan, or Colt as most know me as.

Sadly, I have not read this book yet, so it'll be interesting to learn about this. I actually might read this book. My friend, I'm sure, would love it.

I thought the review was rather interesting and well written. I'd advise adding more description about the book, especially if you ever present it as a prop with the review. My favorite part of this book review was the opening; it stuck out to me like a dog in a pack of wolves. I would also add more detail to the given plot. Yes, they're werewolves, but what happens? Overall, I like it. Great job, good use of grammar and commas from what I seen. I would also add to the ending, make it stronger. Leave the reader with a clear knowledge of whether to read it or not. It seemed neutral to read to me.

Thanks for writing, keep writing, good job, and have fun!
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At the beginning of the novel Chayton, a Native American veterinarian, finds his mate, Keaton, a blonde haired Caucasian teacher.

There should be a comma after "Chayton." Otherwise, it sounds like "Chayton" is the novel.

Together, Chay and “Little Bit” must fight against two different prejudices in order to live their lives.

When you change the names of people, it can be confusing to understand who is who.

The review was good, but it doesn't really explain anything. It needs a little more detail. It was also confusing to follow what you were saying. Otherwise, it was fine.

P.S. There is a section specifically for book reviews.
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Hey there! A very solid little review--where are you getting this published? Overall, there were very few problems, I just spotted a few things you might want to modify?

Explain who "Little Bit" is--we assume it's Keaton, but why leave us hanging?

About a third of the way through the book that changes, instead of being just a book focusing on the relationship and its problem


Between "changes" and "instead" you might prefer a period or semicolon, just to indicate that its a more solid stop.

it turns into erotica. It seemed like after that point that there was a sex scene every couple pages. Even if you ignored the sex scenes, the book started to go downhill. Everything started to happen really fast, the attempts on Keaton’s life and his healing felt rushed. It didn’t have the amount of drama it needed. The ending of the book was also a little predictable and rushed.


Okay, a couple of things here: I've italisized all the verbs so that you can see how you changed verb tenses: everything before "turns" is in present tense, while everything after is in past tense--might want to see to that. Also, I made the two "started"s red because that's a bit redundant.

Keep writing!
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